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To find a better job the T2 qualified people are moving to more wealthy countries - IELTS



mhss 18 / 53  
Mar 1, 2013   #1
Please help me with the essay.

Q: More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like medicine, engineering and computing. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world.

Today, most countries in the world are experiencing skilled migration based on individual preferences. Therefore, it is the professionals' wish to land on a foreign soil rather than the portrayal made by the developed countries. But some people argue that, such migrations are promoted by the offers from well-off countries. Having looked at both sides I believe, this is as a natural phenomenon experienced by many countries.

There are a number of reasons behind why professionals leave the country. The most important reason being the financial issues has made a significant number of movements during the last decade. In addition, it is to achieve a better quality of life for them as well as the off springs. Similarly, they are getting more opportunities to master on what they keen on and will be able to work in a more sophisticated environment for them to perform well. It is not the individual who is benefited but their native countries are also getting advantages by draining foreign currency and the new technology in the field of medicine, engineering and computer.

Nevertheless, there remain some arguments in favour of the opposing view. Some job advertisements offer the professionals an unbelievable salary including facilities and this will be a huge sum of money compared to what they earn at home. In the same way, they will be provided with top ranked jobs and a well recognized working experience could be obtained. However, it has to be highlighted that these offerings are not the only reason for the phenomenon of brain drain experienced by the third world countries.

In conclusion, on the whole, it is the individuals wish to stay in the home soil or migrate. Even though, incentives offered by the foreign countries may affect to a certain extent it is hard to be the sole reason. Therefore blame put on the rich countries remains a misbelief when other factors are come in to play.

temptprovidence 8 / 162  
Mar 1, 2013   #2
i loved the strength in your reasoning.. overall.. agood hold on the topic... :)
christyj 5 / 15  
Mar 3, 2013   #3
Hai Desilva,....

It is not the individual who is benefited but their native countries are also getting advantages by draining foreign currency and the new technology in the field of medicine, engineering and computer; i feel it is not the reason behind why professionals leave the country...?

In the same way, they will be provided with top ranked jobs and a well recognized working experience could be obtained ; this sentence is not clear to me...(.

your arguments for opposing the statement is not strong..

some points..

;the developed countries are enjoying the experts help in their country without spending money on them.
;in a poor country professionals and skilled labor are need to use their natural resources.
;poor country spent a lot of money from their tax to educate these professionals. so these professional should return it to the home country too by their services.

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CHRISTY
dumi 1 / 6793  
Mar 8, 2013   #4
Excellent introduction :)

There are a number of reasonsbehindas to why professionals leave their own country.

. The most important reason being the financial issues has made a significant number of movements during the last decade.

... I guess you can improve its presentation;
Financial benefits had been the most important reason for such migrations during the last decade.
I guess you need to give more specific examples for the reasons. In your first body para, I don't find such specific example. My advice for you is to limit the number of reasons to one for each body para and support that with a more specific example. That helps you manage time for this task too. For the above reason, you could have said;

A doctor of a developing country may be paid about five times more than what he is paid in his own country if he moves to a developed country.

Overall, a good essay and you show excellent writing skills :)
banjo 4 / 8  
Mar 9, 2013   #5
This is a well written essay. Never crossed the world limit. Strong points and connecting words and punctuation. Well deserved for band 8. Keep up the good work


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