First impressions are important. Doing well in interviews is the key to job security.

First impressions are important

Some people think that doing well in interviews is the key to securing a good job. To what extent do you agree?

It is argued that when someone has to interview in any company, so the first impression is the best way to get the job. It is agreed that first impressions are always useful to get and develop the work. This essay will discuss, firstly getting a great job and second, making many good relationships, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

An impressed certificate may be able to be good, but to make employers remembers yourself through the first meeting is more essential because it is the chance to get a great job. Especially, when employees want to find jobs related to the business field because first impressions can create or break a business. A prime example of this is interviewing a new career after graduating or losing the old job. When employees interview a position in the event agency, the employers will judge how the employees present themselves and your venture in public, how they communicate with colleagues and clients, and so on. Hence, making a good first attractive is particularly important and is the best point to receive a good job.

First impressions are also able to make a lot of relationships that have benefits for the career. When the employee has to meet the potential clients to exchange or persuade them to agree with the contract, he needs to create a good impression in the first actions. After that, these customers will have good attitudes with this employee and this company, they maybe share and introduce the best services of the company for their kinship, neighborhoods.

In conclusion, the first impressions will likely become the chances of finding a great job and creating more and more relationships. And almost people agree that is essential that you take the time to get it right in the first instant.

In your second paragraph,
It should be,
'but to make employers remembers yourself'.
Also,
"... a good first attractive is"
You should add the word 'impression' after 'attractive'.

Your reasoning paragraphs are sound. However, you failed to discuss the essay based on the manner prescribed by the original prompt. What I mean to say is, you are missing the direct response to the question: To what extent do you agree or disagree? Your response to the question was simplistic. It was not in accordance with the prompt suggested response method so your essay will be partially correct in representation.

Question: To what extent do you agree?
Response: It is agreed that first impressions are always useful to get and develop the work.

The correct response should have used a first person pronoun since the question was asking you for a direct response to the question. Additionally, the response you gave lacks conviction. This is an emotional response essay so it should have had a stronger sentiment such as :

I am fully aware of the topic being discussed and strongly believe that first impressions...

Based on my understanding of the job interview trend, I am strongly supportive of ...

Considering all the factors, I greatly support this idea because of a number of reasons.

and variations thereof. Once you properly respond to the essay, you will not need to inform the examiner about how you will be discussing or what you will be discussing in the essay. An implied outline will score well since you are really required to outline your discussion points by the prompt.

Your GRA score will definitely not achieve a passing mark because you do not have a good command of the English language. Your sentences are confusing and cause stress to the reader. Your ideas are not well explained nor developed because of the proper grammar and problematic grammar structures. I recommend that you read more English based materials and watch more English television shows, specially news reports, so that you can get a better idea of how to develop clearly explained English sentences and paragraphs.