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IELTS task 1:the fishers in different regions and the world's top ten exporter of fish



tiaDS 73 / 222  
Jan 15, 2014   #1
The chart and table show the number of fishers in millions for different regions between 1970, 1980 and 2000, and the world's top ten exporters of fish in 2000.

The bar chart and table indicate statistics about fishing over three decades ago for several countries.

Overall, Asia achieved the largest number of fishers than other countries in the world, and the top one exporter in the world come from Asia region.

The chart depicts the data of fishers in 1970, 1980 and 2000. Asia achieved the largest number of fishers at 9, 13 and 24 million respectively. Africa's fisher had 1.3 million in 1970 and dramatically increase 2 million in 1980 onwards. South America had constant numbers of fishers, 1.2 million throughout the period. In North America numbered 0.5 million in 1970 and sharply rose 1.2 in 1980, a number that kept unchanged in 2000. From 1970 to 2000, Europe had the fewest fishers who were under 0.6 million.

A more detailed look at the chart indicates that in 2000 listed five of the ten countries were from the Asian region and Thailand was the world's top one exporter of fish, but European and North American countries also followed in the next ranks. Norway and Denmark had second and fifth place, while the USA was in the third large exporter and Canada ranks sixth. China and Taiwan occupy fourth and seventh place, while Russia, Indonesia and South Korea took eighth, ninth and tenth spots.

P.S. Please kindly check my writing. I'm welcoming for anyone wanting to share ideas and opinions.

Pahan 1 / 1824  
Jan 16, 2014   #2
It is always good to include your graph together with the essay. Use the "Attach file(s)" feature for uploading the graph that helps us providing you with more meaningful feedbacks.

However, you follow an excellent structure for this task. :)

Overall, Asia achieved the largest number offishers fishes than other countriesregions in the world, and the top one exporter in the world come from Asia region.

.... comparison is not between countries, but regions of the world (Asia is a continent and not a country). The second part is not very clear :(

Overall, Asia has recorded the largest number of fishes compared to other regions in the world .
I could have assisted you with the latter part if I had a chance of seeing your graph.


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