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IELTS: Fitness betwen 1970 to 2000; 'Since 1970 men became higher membership'



Fardhani Putri 23 / 44  
Feb 3, 2014   #1
The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000.
The bar chart describes the membership of fitness between men and women over thirty years, from 1970 to 2000.
Generally, it can be seen from the chart that the number of two members of fitness fluctuated.
Since 1970 men became higher membership than women, then it increased highly at 4000 men in 1975. During twenty years, the number of men decreased but until 1995, it rose highly and reach a peak at 1995. After five years, in 2000, it went down significantly to the position 1000 members of men.

However, women started up at 1000 in 1970 and over fifthteen years, it rose highly at approximately 2800 and it felt down slightly then rose up again with the same number at 1985. In 2000, the number of membership of women decreased slightly to 2000 and became higher than men.


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Rahat Ullah - / 1  
Feb 4, 2014   #2
The given chart shows a survey report about the fitness membership of men and women for three decades from 1970 to 2000. Although it is clear from the given chart that there were fluctuation between the number men and women, on the average men were leading women in this case.

In 1970, the number of fit men were doubled then women, the number of men were 2000 while women were 1000, the same number was increased two times of both for men and women, the umber of men rose to 4000 while women reached to 2000. In 1980, the number of both males and females were decreased, and in the following years from 1980 to 1990, there were a little bit fluctuations but the numbers of both males and females were around 2000 in all these years. There was a dramatic increased in the fitness of both categories in 1995, men reached to the highest point of 5000, while females reached again to less than 3000, same like in 1985. For the first time the number of fit men dropped to its lowest number of 1000, the number of women also dropped to 2000.

If we study it statistically, then one can argue that the number of fit women were oscillating around 2000, on the average, while the number of men were have seen a dramatic increased of period in 1995, but goes down very soon in next few years.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 4, 2014   #3
The bar chart describesillustrates the details of fitness membership of fitness between men and women over thirty years, from 1970 to 2000.

Generally, it can be seen from the chart that the number of two members of fitness fluctuated.

This is not a good overview. How did it fluctuate? Or what was your major observation?
Overall, the fitness membership of males have recorded a major fluctuations compared to the membership of females during the period under review.


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