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essay: following the host country's culture for visitors


lovemylife 1 / 2  
Jun 23, 2014   #1
Some people b elieve that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Discuss both thee view and give your own opinion.

In recent year, travelling has become a popular trend throughout the world. Some adopt a view that following the culture and customs of destined country is necessary and compulsory for travellers. While opponents argue that in order to welcoming the guests, it is better for the host country to be more open to the new culture which visitors bring to. In this essay, the justifications of these opinions will be discussed.

On the one hand, adapting and following the culture when staying in another country is a basic requirement for travellers. In fact, every country has their own particular customs that the strangers should obey to express the respectfulness to the local people. As a result of this, the more newcomers respect the differences, the easier for them to have interpersonal interaction with indigenous inhabitants and enjoy new things. In stark contrast, they are subject to troubles, problems happening if they break the local regulations. For example, in some Islamic country such as Afghanistan, Pakistan, women usually wear marks and tight costumes which cover all their head and body except their eyes and only their husbands are permitted to see their face. So, it is unacceptable for visitors to try to see their faces or take off their marks unless they want to be attacked and even killed. Therefore, "when in Rome, do as Romans do" is a wise advice for the enjoyment of the new culture as well as the security to travellers.

On the other hand, it is also tremendously beneficial for the host country if they have open-mind toward the other cultures which visitors bring to. Given the handsome incomes, profits are obtainable in tourism industry. Additionally, along with the development of tourism industry, it also intensifies an increasing number of various related services such as restaurants, hotels and so on which solve the unemployment problems for local country. Thus, the authorities are recommended to welcome the differences from others in order to encourage and attract more and more foreigners come to their country.

In conclusion, as far as I am concerned, both visitors and local country should respect the differences of each other for the beneficial of themselves. However, beside be open for the visitors, the local government should have precaution on problems such as violence, pornography from visitors which may harmful for their citizens.

kbektas 3 / 7 3  
Jun 24, 2014   #2
The Romans
The tourism industry

benefit of themselves.
I am not sure but beside being could be better, I think.
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Jun 25, 2014   #3
In recent year

In recent years

destined country

the host country

In this essay, the justifications of these opinions will be discussed.

You should state your opinion in the introduction.

they are subject to troubles, problems happening

they are likely to encounter troubles

SoTherefore , it is unacceptable for visitors

beside be open for the visitors

apart from being open to the culture of visitors

which may be harmful
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 18, 2014   #4
Excellent introduction. You display very good writing skills - good grammar, vocabulary, presentation of ideas :) However, I like if you stated your opinion before concluding the introduction instead of the line that you have written last in this para. It sounds too vague and in my personal opinion, it does not add any value to your flow. Had you stated your opinion there, then it would help you convince your reader better.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Jul 26, 2014   #5
In recent year, travelling has become a popular trend throughout the world. Some adopt a view that following the culture and customs of destined country is necessary and compulsory for travellers. While opponents argue that in order to welcoming the guests, it is better for the host country to be more open to the new culture which visitors bring to. In this essay, the justifications of these opinions will be discussed.

even this essay opens for discussion/ both views, it is always nicer if you state your opinion in the end of the introduction.

every country has their own particular customs

every should be followed by it. every country has its own particular customs

it is also tremendously beneficial for the host country if they have open-mind toward the other cultures which visitors bring to

they is faulty reference pronoun. Please check it


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