Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and
behavior .Others disagree and think that host country should welcome cultural
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
These days due to the increasing number of turists around the world,there is a number of heated discussions of whether visitors to other countries should obey cultural rules and traditions of the destination country or not.In my observation,it would be a great opportunity to learn from both parties culture.However,in this essay I discuss both point of views.
To begin with,considering the point that when people step into a new country they do not leave behind all they've learnt before and their culture,is crucial.Each country has special traditions and behavioral rules and this can effect on the host counrty as turists go there.As a result local people believe that their society lose its balance and integration by combining visitor's culture with local tradition and social rules.And this leads to more misunderstanding and in long term make governing the country cope with many problems.So the cons believe that to prevent upcoming multicultrual problems,it is better to encourage visitors to behave and obey their local cultural rules.
In contrast, there is a huge group of people who consider the subject as chance to improve and update culture by learning positive points of foregin visitors traditions.This would be a excellent practice to increase the communication skills,tolarnce and empathy.Moreover,visitors could help the host country to learn uncommon points of views and communicationg with visitors from other countries in some words is like traveling around the world without leaving the house.
To sum it up,as I see the issue,forcing visitors to behave like host country would not bring anything new and can not help to positive changes to the host.By opening the arms to new cultures host could benefit from them by experiencing new aspects of life and could help to borden thei horrizons.
Very well thought-out. There are a number of sentence-verb agreement errors where your subject is plural and your verb is singular (and vice versa). I've picked a few of them out below. Be sure that "is" always goes with a singular subject and "are" goes with a plural subject.
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"And this (singular subject) leads to more misunderstanding and in long term
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Also, be sure to exclude phrases that might clutter or slow down your writing.
"To begin with,considering the point that when people step into a new country they do not leave behind all they've learnt before and their culture,is crucial. "
"To sum it up,as I see the issue ,forcing visitors to behave like..."
I see too many vacuity words like: in contrast, to sum it up, to begin with, as a result, however, moreover and other. You often use them at the very beginning of the sentence. And it seems to me when I read this essay that You are just trying to fulfill the characters number task, but not the point of the essay.