Nowadays, more and more bikes are produced to meet human needs. As a form of transportations, cycling has its advantages and disadvantages . To begin with, cycling is a low cost means of traffic, a normal bike is not very expensive and we don't have to spend money on things such as petrol and costly repairs. Besides, cycling can be considered as a way of doing exercise. It helps us keep fit and stay healthy. What is more, cycling is environmentally frienly because it release no pollutant to air. However, cycling has several drawbacks. First and foremost, it doesn't protect us from weather and fumes in air like other automobiles. Secondly, cycling in a busy road seems to be dangerous, drivers sometimes don't take notice of people on bikes. Finally, cycling is not good for long trip since not only does it move slowly but it make us feel tired as well. In conclusion, although cycling does have some disadvantages, everyone should ride a bike to improve their health.
As a form of transportation, cycling has both advantages, and disadvantages.
You need to identify the noun / subject as singular or plural. Also, set up the essay as comparison/contrast you give it more structure.
You need to start a new paragraph, with the contrasts. This sets them off and sets apart the intro.
Next, you need to add a conclusion. Draw out the point that both sides make sense, but its good for you health.
Short but well written essay. Pay attention to the word choices. Use a dictionary and a thesaurus. Make the structural changes about paragraphs. Add a conclusion paragraph.
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To begin with, cycling is a low cost means of traffic, the opening of the advantages of cycling
However, cycling has several drawbacks. the opening of the disadvantages of cycling
There will be a significant improvement in your writing if you follow the general structure of essay with free topic as follows:
- Opening paragraph: general & narrow topic statement; thesis statement along with writer's brief perspective
- Body paragraph: writer's ideas, reason, examples/general facts/scientific facts (repeat the same flow if you have multiple ideas, but in different paragraphs)
- Concluding paragraph: paraphrase the thesis statement, conlusion, writer's hope/opinion/suggestion etc
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Anyway, interesting topic. Keep writing!
