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The form of a wave-energy machine and several locations that it can be placed



ReskiRamadani88 43 / 56  
Oct 27, 2016   #1
The diagrams show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location

The diagram gives information about the form of a wind turbine and several locations that can be placed. Overall, can be seen that turbine which placed on domestic will produce 100 kilowatts smaller than the resulting of generator is 1,5 megawatts.

The machine consist of Steel Tower, wind sensor, Generator and computer. Steel tower function is a pole holder and place of generator and wind sensor. Wind sensor function is accepts a wind and lit generator. And the last is computer, its function is accepts info from sensor. The process starts when the turbine is reached by wind, as a results, generator will be lit because wind was reached a sensor and computer was sent info from sensor. After that the turbine will be turned on by generator.

On the other hand, there are 3 locations of wind turbine, those are sea, local area, and hill. Based o the figures, we can see that, the turbine has been placed in sea result of landscape not spoiled. Domestic turbine produces 100 kilowatts. It is smaller than other which the generator produces 1,5 megawatts. Besides, Turbine has been placed on the hill have maximum wind strengths.


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ryan31 65 / 89  
Oct 27, 2016   #2
hello reski
here is my advice for you
hope it works

complex sentence (who, which, where) + V1

Overall, it can be seen that turbine which is placed on (...) 100 kilowatts is smaller than the ...

The machine is consist of Steel Tower...
Wind sensor function is accepts thea wind and litlift up generator. avoid using 'and' in the first sentence >>And the last is computer,

itsit is function is accepts info from the sensor.

As a results ,the generator will be lit because the wind was reached ...

..., there are 3three locations of wind ...

Based on the figures , we can seen that, the turbine (...) in sea and the result of landscape is not spoiled.
It is smaller than others which is the generator ...
... placed on the hill where have maximum wind strengths.

thanks
keep writing
Anna94 47 / 50  
Oct 27, 2016   #3
Hello,

Overall, ([it] >> you should put subject here) can be seen ...

The machine consist of ... [you forget to include blades in your writing]

Steel tower function is a pole holder ...
Wind sensor function is accepts a wind ...

..., its function is accepts info >>information from sensor.

Domestic turbine produces 100 kilowatts [of current/electricity]

Gluck :D
nurainiyusuf16 47 / 73  
Oct 27, 2016   #4
Hello Reski!
Allow me to give you some suggestion.

Overall,(need subject)it can be seen that turbine which is placed (Passive; S+To be+ V3) on domestic will produce 100 kilowatts smaller than the resulting of generator is 1,5 megawatts .

...generator.And (Reduce use "And" at beginning sentence) the last is computer, its ...

On the other hand (These words use for show contradiction), there are 3 locations ...
Based on the figures, we can see that, ...
Domestic turbine produces 100 kilowatts. It is smaller than other which the generator produces 1,5 megawatts.

Repition

I hope it can help you.
Keep practice for make it perfect :)
badafebriani17 34 / 41  
Oct 27, 2016   #5
1. Wind sensor function is accepts a wind and lit generator
there are double subject, may you can change the sentence like this:

e.g.: (the function of wind sensor is to accepts) a wind and to lit up generator.

2. And the last is (a) computer, (it function is to accepts) info from sensor.

its= pronoun--> you can make it "it function is to accepts"

3. ..., as a results, generator will be (lift up) because wind was ...

will be lit ---> will be lift up

4. After that the turbine will ...

put comma after "that" word..

5. Based o the figures, we can ...
may be you just miss spelling--> "based on"

good luck


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