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Freedom for creative artists is essential for the development of society and art



selena y 1 / 3  
Aug 2, 2012   #1
With the development of the awareness about liberty and democracy, the freedom of speaking out is stated by public increasingly, and at the time, creative artists almost become the most crucial part of people who is willing and able to express their own ideas. Therefore, a debate about whether creative artists could express ideas freely in various ways (in words, pictures, videos or music) which the like and without government restrictions.

It is evidently reasonable for some to argue that creative artists' right of expressing themselves should be protected. Firstly, the right is a crucial substantial part of person's liberty and society democracy. In the history, many governments which restricted people to public ideas and even caught or killed the person who was acquired danger for the dominion are thought lacking liberty and fair. And secondly, with being given enough freedom artists would create more excellent creations and advance the level of art. As we can see, the heyday of the art in history is always the period when government's restrictions on what artist do were lest. At last, while artists creations are various and constructed all sorts of expressing ways, public have more interest to acquire and accept the creations and the ideas of artists, which increase the transform of the culture and the new ideas.

By contrast, some other people do not agree that opinion and they believe that without restriction will lead to confusion and mess. Some unhealthy or passive views and ideas might mislead public and even lead someone to crime, depression or other terrible situation. They support that all activities must abide by some rules and be restricted at some levels.

In summary, I would concede that some compositions with negative ideas or unhealthy contents would take bad effect to public and that would be restricted by government. Despite that, I believe the freedom for creative artists is essential for the development of society and art. Overall, I am convinced that creative artists should be given the freedom to expressing themselves and at last the superior and great ideas and creations will constructed the majority of art.

Jennyflower81 - / 674  
Aug 2, 2012   #2
Hi, I can help you with this paper.

With the development of the awareness about liberty and democracy, the freedom of speaking out is stated by public increasingly, and at the time, creative artists almost become the most crucial part of people who is willing and able to express their own ideas. Therefore, a debate about whether creative artists could express ideas freely in various ways (in words, pictures, videos or music) which the like and without government restrictions.

Your sentence structure is long and wordy. Try to be more concise. Here, in this paragraph, you mean to say these things:
1) There is a growing concern about rights, liberty, and democracy.
2) Freedom of speech is of the utmost importance.
3) An artist has the opportunity to exercise their freedom of speech through their artwork.
4) Artists use many forms of media to express themselves.
5) Main point (thesis) One popular debate is whether or not the government should regulate and restrict certain works of art.

You need to work on your grammar a bit more, and focus on being clear and concise. Make your argument apparent throughout the paper, and give strong reasons to support your viewpoint. Great job so far, keep it up :) Good luck in school.
OP selena y 1 / 3  
Aug 3, 2012   #3
Thank you very much! And I will take your advice and consider my trouble.


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