[IELTS - Task 1]; French Dialects - report writing

Given are two figures concerning interactions in various dialects between French adults and their offspring. Generally overall, Alsatian replaced Occitan as the most widely-enjoined indigenous language as time elapsed.

It is worth pointing out Alsatian and Occitan were equally pivotal in terms of routinely spoken languages with the number of approximately 600 thousand users. Albeit, as the frequency of usage declined, Occitan enjoyed a burgeoning growth to just under 1.1 million users, outstripped over three times less prevalent Alsatian which now stood at somewhere in the vicinity of 200 thousand adults users. Regardless of the frequency of utilized dialects, Breton, Creole, Corsican successively shared the next ranks in the ladder of popularity. This order remained constant given did Breton witness a more significant increase than Creole, Corsican when they were frequently spoken.

Though being rated as three lest significant languages, Breton, Creole, Corsican only saw as marginal drop in number of adults speak to their children whilst Alsatian has experienced a decrease of one third its previous quantity and Occitan has overcome a half. As a result, Alsatian has become the most widely-enjoyed indigenous language though it would be a step backward in comparison with its prevalence in earlier times.

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