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"My Only Friend"



Bikash2013 3 / 11  
Dec 29, 2012   #1
15th November, 2008. This date vividly strikes my mind each time I flashback my past. I lost her eternally. Chandani! My relentless voice was slackening down gradually with the drizzling rain, like the smoke slowly vanishing as moving up in the atmosphere. I was watching as if it was a cinema or a play. Helpless . Motionless . My Heart throbbed in its highest pulse ever. My eyes soaked in tears. But still, I was watching. And yet, Frozen- like an ice, a statue or a building. Solely, like a "living dead". Instantly, I summon an Internal impetus to help my static leg set in motion and rush towards her. She was still breathing. There was some hope left. I tautly hold her hands. She glimpsed at me and smile- a profound smile. An ocean of tears dripped down my cheeks like a Niagara Falls, persistently. She utters some words but indecipherable. I ensue each word but ultimately, she closed her eyes and adhere her lips.

Doctor! We rush her towards operation theater. Dozens of pictures played in my mind - picture of "us". We barely departed in past days despite different family background. Not only she had a great influence on me, but in fact, she is the epitome of my every success. From aloof, heedless, complacent and irresponsible characteristic person , I was changed to jovial, painstaking, candor and responsible -me-today- and all these credits goes to "her"- Chadani . In my life, I've loved, I've lost, I've missed, I've hurt, I've trusted, I've made mistakes but most of all I've learned and she is the teacher who taught me. Life for me was just nothing at all but, she defined it for me-" Life is like a box of chocolates. We never know what we are going to get neither we know what we are going to lose." She adorned every page of my life like a rainbow and taught me the real meaning of life- taught me how to smile in pain, how to success in failure, how to overcome with distress, how to light life in the middle of darkness. She is not only a friend to me. In fact, she is the instructor, mender and most of all, my only one friend-best friend- I will never ever have another again.

yumna 2 / 3  
Dec 29, 2012   #2
it is good,but I have a question why there is a full stop here "Helpless . Motionless " Thank you
OP Bikash2013 3 / 11  
Dec 29, 2012   #3
Thank you very much for your comment. Umm.. that fullstop is used to describe the two phases I encountered which are not simultaneous. I think you got my reply. If not I am ready to reply you .
Rocio2395 1 / 2  
Dec 29, 2012   #4
My relentless voice was slackening down gradually with the drizzling rain, like the smoke slowly vanishing as moving up in theinto the atmosphere.

Are you writing in present tense or past tense?
OP Bikash2013 3 / 11  
Dec 29, 2012   #5
Rocio2395- That was in past tense.. I was citing my experience of past time..
Rocio2395 1 / 2  
Dec 31, 2012   #6
...I summoned ...
...held her hand...
Not only did she have a great influence on me...

She adorned every page of my life like a rainbow and taught me the real meaning of life- taught me how to smile in pain, how to succeed in failure, how to overcome in distress, and how to light life in the middle of darkness. She is not only a friend to me; she is the instructor, mender and most of all, my only one friend-best friend- I will never ever have another again.
OP Bikash2013 3 / 11  
Dec 31, 2012   #7
Rocio2395- Thank you very much for your help.


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