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"My friend is called Yuri, he is from Riga." - Describe a Person That You Know


neoner 1 / 2  
Apr 19, 2011   #1
Sorry for my English grammar and all kind of mistakes. I am not a best writer so if can check my work and correct my mistakes!

My friend is called Yuri. He is a 16 year old. He lives in a small apartment not far from Riga center with his parents and brother. He is a student. But apart from that, he has a lot of hobbies. He spends most of his spare time playing computer games or reading interesting articles on the Internet about different thing. Of course he does some sports too, for example he likes to play football, floor ball, go swimming.

Yuri has short, dark, and little bit curly hair and girls say that his blue eyes are really beautiful. He is a tall, very well-built teenager. Apart from being fit, he is also intelligent, well-read person. He is hilarious and he smiles a lot. Yuri can always tell a good joke and his jokes are so funny.

Yuri is kind, helpful and creative. He will always try to help you with all that he can, especially he always helps his family a lot. He is a guy who knows how to talk with people in any situation and find the words to cheer them. His best friend is his brother Uldis with whom he can share his secrets, describe his own problems and eat pizza while watching a hockey game. His priority always was and is family and only after that his friends and fun. That's why he's a such a mature , great friend and awesome buddy.
marzyola1 2 / 6  
Apr 19, 2011   #2
"He is a 16 year old." He is 16 year old and lives in a small apartment not far from Riga Center with his parents and brother.

"He spends most of his spare time playing computer games or reading interesting articles on the Internet about different thing. Of course he does some sports too, for example he likes to play football, floor ball, go swimming." He likes to play football, floor ball and to go swimming but most of his spare time is spent playing games on the computer or reading interesting articles on the Internet

"Yuri has short, dark, and little bit curly hair and girls say that his blue eyes are really beautiful. He is a tall, very well-built teenager. Apart from being fit, he is also intelligent, well-read person. He is hilarious and he smiles a lot. Yuri can always tell a good joke and his jokes are so funny. "

Yuri has short dark, slightly curly hair and girls say that he has really beautiful blue eyes. He is very tall and fit. Also he is intelligent as he likes to read. Yuri has many jokes and his jokes are very funny.

Hopefully I have given you enough examples on how to change the last paragraph. Good luck!
OP neoner 1 / 2  
Apr 20, 2011   #3
Really thanks!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 21, 2011   #4
Great thread. Raimonds, if you have time to type it again, we can look to see if you still have any errors. Keep practicing!

Sorry for my English grammar and all kind of mistakes.

No need to apologize! I'm glad you have errors, so we can help. :-) Thanks for joining our community... do you have any questions about those corrections?

Do this:
He is a 16 years old.
or
He is sixteen years old and lives in...
or
He is a sixteen year-old and lives in...

Very good sentence! -----> That's why he's a such a mature, great friend and awesome buddy.


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