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Friendship essay; As a human being, one can hardly do without a friend


jenny0103 1 / -  
Apr 1, 2015   #1
What a definition of friends? As a human being, one can hardly do without a friend, In addition, friends are something more important and useful to us than our own relative. Friendship is indispensable in daily life, and it is an important role in a life. The most important qualities a good friend should have are honest, supportive, and being a good listener because these are important and essential for a friend and make a friendship last.

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mohjawahir 11 / 17  
Apr 2, 2015   #2
Last, be a good listener is the important and essential for a friendbeing a good listener is the important thing for a friend (important and essential are the same meaning) . what friends are for is, when sometimes a person cannot tell their parents or other people something then she/he come to their friend. if she/he feel down, ask them what's wrong, and really listen to the story or answer. Friends can give some help or advice while listening. listening show that friend care about she/he, Without listening skill, the friendship is empty.
IqbalThemi 44 / 46 13  
Apr 2, 2015   #3
Hi, jenny. this is some suggestion

Second, to maintain good a friendship isclose relationship with our friends must be support each other. A Friend should not wreck she/he's dream or goal, or not be supportive whether she/he are down or sad.A friend should not break relation and must care with others.It's important good friends should never let she/he feel alone,it is really important to give attention amongst friendsand always be supportive at all times and all situations.Supportive will help she/he to achieve their goal, and become the person who they want to be.and always having supportive behaviour with friends at all times and situations will help everyone to achieve their goal in close relationship
EF_Carol - / 145 39  
Apr 2, 2015   #4
What's the definition of friends? As a human being, one can hardly do without a friend, In addition, friends are something more important and useful to us than our own relatives. Friendship is indispensable in daily life, and it is an important role in life. The most important qualities a good friend should have are honest, supportive, and being a good listener, because these are important and essential for a friend and make a friendship last.

First, honesty is an important quality a good friend should have. No one wants a liar for a friend, who can't be trusted, or friends who talk some things bad behind their back. Untrustworthy can never be a friend. A good friends should trust each other in all situations and tell the truth no matter how harmful truth was. Everyone has a secret, but if a friend tells she/he a secret and asks them not to tell anyone, then she/he should keep the promise because the friend should be loyal to each other. Honesty protects friends strong and makes friends last.

Second, to maintain good a friendship they must support each other. A friend should not wreck she/he's dream or goal, or not be supportive whether she/he are down or sad. It's important good friends should never let she/he feel alone, and always be supportive at all times and all situations. Supportive will help she/he to achieve their goal, and become the person who they want to be.

Last, being a good listener is important and essential for a friend. What friends are for is, when sometimes a person cannot tell their parents or other people something then she/he come to their friend. if she/he feel down, ask them what's wrong, and really listen to the story or answer. Friends can give some help or advice while listening. Listening shows that a friend cares about she/he, Without listening skill, the friendship is empty.

Good friends are hard to find. Personally, when I looking for new friends, the most three important quality friends should have are honest, supportive, and a good listener. Honest friend will maintain trust in friendship, supportive will make me achieve my goal and a good listener will make our friendship last. Therefore, there is important quality in friendship.

Your essay is refreshingly honest and straightforward. I think you need to concentrate on not having run-on sentences, and on the proper use of an article. You introduce three factors that make up a friend, and then you explain each on in a paragraph, and then you conclude. This is the right form!

You need to break up the long sentences into two sentences, and use commas to allow the reader to breath. Your spelling and vocabulary are good, but I think you repeat yourself a lot, and should try for more sentence variety.

I think you're on the right track with this essay as it stands, but with a little fine tuning it could be excellent. I applaud your high standard of friendship!

ef_carol


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