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Future job choice - university students should study whatever they like?



arhaz 1 / -  
Oct 14, 2019   #1

choice of a study major



Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


There are two opposing theory on the policy of choosing the major in which the person is going to pursue their study. Some people vote for personal interests and others insist on studying majors efficient for the future. Although there are many benefit to second attitude, considering the interests definitely is the preferable theory in ny idea.

Nowadays most countries development seriously depends on science and technology. Moreover, in specific periods of time, lack of a certain field of study is needed. Consequently, countries should fill this needs by educating specialists. Despite the fact that it id an absolute right of each individual to be satisfied with their concentration, urging people to seek a particular degree in deniable in some occasions.

On the other hand, being interested in something like your major, which is a time-consuming process, bring many benefits. Definitely it makes the person happy and content with their life. Furthermore, productivity, as the most important factor of any workplace, will go up considerably in this situation. Although in some cases it may turn out frustrating if there was no need for their skill in the job market. It is worth to get your loved field of study a chance.

According to a paper, on disadvantageous of pursuing a compulsory education, 70 percent of the subjects scolded themselves of giving up their dreams. On the contrary, specialists in a field who faced unemployment, optimistically believed that the energy they take from their studies really suits them.

On the whole, studying a major with career prospects is beneficial for both society and people. But interests are an integral part of choosing one that increase the quality of workplaces and the people's life styles.

Konkhmer12345 3 / 6  
Oct 15, 2019   #2
@arhaz
Hello!
Hope my below comments are helpful for your writing.

I've found some spelling errors in the following terms:
many benefits
my idea
country development
this needs
it is
it is worth getting
on advantages

Best regards,
roswita116 16 / 37  
Oct 15, 2019   #3
Great structure!! 👍👍I think your writing task 2 at least can get band 6.5 !!!

You both explained pros and cons and took several examples to support your statements.

Furthermore, you utilized a lot of linking words and synonyms.🙂🙂

I had written the same type of writing task 2 recently but don't know if I should stand firmly at one side or not..( I mean after I discuss both point of views, should I state which position I prefer or i think it is better than the other one in summary?)

Hope my opinion would help you.🙂🙂
Ali20 8 / 14  
Oct 16, 2019   #4
Hello @arhaz!

these my comments;

*majors efficient, countries development ( adj + N), efficient majors.developing/developed countries
* i really appreciate your way to deliver the paraphrase of question and you did it well, yet i'll suggest you to put your general reason of your thesis statement for helping examiners to understand your writing's aim.

* i examine your second paragraph don't give strong argument. you should make it cohesive between sentences contained your paragraph. it's like when you make history it needs good flow and well transition between accidents.

Keep spirit! i believe you can solve it gradually.


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