Unanswered [4] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width   Posts: 4


When did the future switch from being a promise to being a threat?



Ania0703 1 / -  
Apr 1, 2013   #1
Hey, I need someone's help to correct my essay:

Novelist, Chuck Palahniuk asked one day ''. In my opinion it is difficult to find a good answer to this question nevertheless in this essay I will try to explain what I think about it.

Firstly, as far as I am concerned, the future always has been a kind of threat. Even thousands years ago, when live was not as complicated as it is now, people were afraid af that what was waiting for them. The adults were worried about food, accommodation, living in peace and finally about their children and their happiness. Teenagers were feeling scared of getting married, having babies and being resposible for them. Nowadays, people's troubles are identical but addictionaly they have to think about getting a job that will be good enough to have money that rules the contemporary world.

On the oder hand, future also always has been a promise. Although people are afraid of that what is going to come, they are excited about these things, too. They hope that their lives will improve, they will be happier then they are now. Everybody expect their dreams coming true one day, what is very probably to happen. That is why our future is not a thing that we should be only worried about but also look foward it, because we never know what good can ocurre. And for me that is the best thing about it.

To conclude I think the future always has been either a promise and a threat. We are afraid of that what is coming but we are hopeful about that, too.

temptprovidence 8 / 162  
Apr 1, 2013   #2
Even thousands years ago, when live was not as complicated as it is now, people were afraid af that what was waiting for them.

Even thousands of years ago, when lif e was not as complicated as it is now, people were afraid o f that what was waiting for them

SIMPLE TYPING ERRORS!!


Teenagers were feeling scared of getting married

drop this word out.

On the od er hand, future also always has been a promise

On the od er hand, future also always hashave been a promise

what is very probably to happen. That is why our future is not a thing that we should be only worried about but also look foward it, because we never know what good can ocurre

what is very probable to happen. That is why our future is not a thing that we should be only worried about but also look for ward to it, because we never know what good can ocurre

type carefully!

that was a good narration overall. use have for past present and future :)
dumi 1 / 6793  
Apr 1, 2013   #3
the future always has been a kind of threat

.... future is not yet born.
the future would always be a kind of threat

Even thousands years ago, whenlivelife was not as complicated as it is now, people were afraid af that what was waiting for them.

The adults were worried about food, accommodation, living in peace and finally about their children and their happiness.

Our ansesters were worried about meeting basic requirements.

Teenagers were feeling scared of getting married, having babies and being resposible for them.

Today, the teenagers are worried about committing themselves to a life long partner, hence they are scared to get married.
abcdefgh 5 / 21  
Apr 1, 2013   #4
your essay is brief . your idea is not enough and you have to support your idea , you describe only meaning of topic.. but structure of your essay is good.


Home / Writing Feedback / When did the future switch from being a promise to being a threat?
Need Writing or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳

Academic AI Writer:
Custom AI Writer ◳