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My gap year to overcome series of struggles



Dudalima 1 / -  
Oct 16, 2021   #1

My gap year essay - Pandemic, work, struggles and social service



After my high school graduation, I needed to overcome series of struggles. Due to Covid-19, no one in my family had a job and I focused on work to support my family during the Brazilian Crises. Equally important I spent a huge time working on my well-being before I decided to go to college, I started my therapy to overcome a case of sexual harassment, which today is already being resolved and dealt with, by the authorities.

Before my graduation, I was personally nominated by my technical teachers for a job position at X Enterprise, a bigger Italian distribution of solar energy. I've worked designing solar projects as a specialized renewable energy consultant. By working I could provide my family with a stable situation during the pandemic, at the same time I could pay for my own therapy.

Further, I invested large energy in opportunities to develop what I am passionate about, and start a parallel business. I could direct and lead a Design Team on Y Initiative giving classes for youngs in marginalized communities and Design workshops for the board. The experience increased my thirst to make and understand human connections, I attend international programs at Northwestern University and Yale University. Also, I took time to improve my artist portfolio in visual arts and illustration and sports I used to practice in school, such as tennis.

In the last year, overcoming a trauma, working harder, discovering my leadership, and making social service I become the person I would like to be 1 year ago. Confident, at peace with myself, and ready to take new challenges

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15366  
Oct 17, 2021   #2
Before my graduation,

Further

These do not refer to activities that you participated in during your gap year. The gap year references any and all activities you participated in after graduation but before enrolling in the next academic year. You should discuss activities during the academic year where you were not enrolled. The problem, is that there is a delicate topic that occurred during the off year. If you do not feel comfortable discussing it, then do not refer to it at all. Develop the way you spent a year in lock-down instract You will not be faulted for it.

I invested large energy in opportunities

Did this happen during the gap year? If it did, then this alone will make for an excellent singular focus for your narration.
valenisea - / 1  
Oct 18, 2021   #3
@Dudalima

I think it would be great to change to "I needed to overcome to series of struggles." There are other errors regarding wording. If you need my help, let me know ^^


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