Hi,
I have a suggestion for you : )
Leave one blank line between paragraphs... it has nothing to do withe English writing, but it gives a neat and tidy look to your essay! That would certainly impress your examiner and his happy mood is important to you ; )
Some human right activists argue that colleges should not limit the number of female students in any fields. Frankly, I do not completely support this idea on account ofsome following causes.
Your introduction is pretty short, yet it satisfies the required structure. That's cool : )
First of all, it isunevenunfair to prevent women from acquiring knowledge in case they are intelligent and healthycommitted enough to complete their courses in universities. These days, governments are increasingly aware that their countries would not develop steadily unless females wereare fairly treated in education. In fact, an inevitable token of this is that more and more ladies are successful in business, science and even politics, which are often widely known as men's private areas.
The term healthy generally refers to physical health. So health and intelligent do not go together!