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IELTS TASK 1 : Student joining education by gender.


SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Apr 7, 2014   #1
Helow Friend, please correct my writing entirely :D
thank you
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The bar charts compare the number of male and female in terms of time study attendance during a period of time from 1970 to 1991.

Overall, the number of student who enrolled in the full-time education was far higher than part-time education's member.

A report by the male chart reveals that there was an increasing over 100 students in the part-time course over 20 year measurements. However, only 100 male enrolled onto such course in 1970. Standing by contrast from a series of female data illustrated that there was a dramatic increase by almost 200 students in the first 10 years. Since then, the figures leveled off in the following decades.

A closer look at the full-time education number of students, males made up 1000 student in the outset then felt into decline before gained 900 member's course in 1990. On the other hand, female who enrolled in full-time education showed a gradual increase. Appearing 700 students in 1970, the figures reach the top notch by 1100 members in 1990.

Interestingly, there was a consecutive increase in the male joining part-time education, while female engaging with full-time education escalated gradually.




LeonP 3 / 5 1  
Apr 8, 2014   #2
Good writing and you pretty much sum up everything.

I maybe would add some concluding sentence like:

"In conclusion, while the number of female student enrolled for a fulltime education has steadily grown, the number of male fulltime students maintains stable with a tendency to decline"

or something like that ;-)
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 8, 2014   #3
The bar charts compareshow/ illustrate/ present the number of male and female in terms of time study attendance during a period of time from 1970 to 1991.

A report by the male chart reveals that there was an increasingincrease over 100 students in the part-time course over 20 year measurements.

Interestingly, there was a consecutive increase in the male joining part-time education, while female engaging with full-time education escalated gradually

This task aims to assess our report writing skills. So, be more formal with your writing !
techgeek 7 / 13 1  
Apr 8, 2014   #4
I think you wrote writing task 1 perfectly. There are some mistakes such as felt , it should be 'fell', otherwiseexcellentjobbuddy!:))


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