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Gender equality in University Admission

king jane 2 / 5 3  
Aug 14, 2013   #1
Nowadays more and more people voice out the importance of gender equality when universities enroll male and female students in every subject.Whether it is necessary that the number of each gender in every subject must be same?

It is true that there are advantages of gender co-coorperation in study.Male and female students study together,which will help them to eliminate the fear and shy between them.It works on balancing the inequality between male and female,and makes more chances for female students to further study at some particular area,such as astronautics,construction,military ect.

However,we should consider that there are gender differences existing.According to the science reserch,the male and the female are good at different subject.The male shows their advantages in science subjects,while the female seem to do better in art subjects.Otherwise,it is impossible for universities fo enroll the same number of each gender in all subject,because the resouces of students are unbalanced at the first place.When it comes to language departements,it is obvious that the number of female students is more than the male students'. We should put more attention that chosing which subject depends on students' choices which are adjudged by there interests and features,instead of gender equality.

University education plays a critical role in culturing excellent people of society.It should be aroused the attention that univercities have the responsibility to score students by their perfomances and abilities,educate them according to their features and personalities,other than gender.

thanks for your kindness!

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Aug 15, 2013   #2
It seems you are new to EF :) Welcome !
First there are few admin stuff I need to tell you. Mention your purpose in the topic itself (e.g. TOEFL, IELTS, GRE etc.) so that others can provide you with more task related feedbacks. Then include the essay prompt on top of your post for us to understand what your prompt really asks for. Finally, these type of essays should be posted to Writing Feedback forum. Okkkkk.... let's get on to your essay :)

Male and female students study together,which will help them to eliminate the fear and shy between them

Male and female students studying together help them build a better mutual understanding by eliminating barriers such as fear or shyness.
sksbl88 - / 29 6  
Aug 15, 2013   #3
Follow Dumi... He/she knows what he/she is talking about.

Ignore Admissions2012. He does a one size fits all and offers no real help nor takes into consideration all the schools, countries' cultures or how English is viewed in other places or what is acceptable and not based on culture again.

The guy just wants to make money and hopes you pay him $$$$$$$$$$ for his services. Don't. This place is free and Dumi is badazzzz
OP king jane 2 / 5 3  
Aug 16, 2013   #4
hi Dumi,
Thanks for your advises.before i join EF,my friend told me that there is a guy/girl,who is full of responsibility and help others as possible as he/she can. it seems u r the one .

if there are problems about my essays,please point out without mercy.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Aug 16, 2013   #5
.... thanks :D
Well.... I am a SHE :D ...Lol
Yes .... I am happy to help you with your essays and I hope I was not rude with my previous comment. I proposed that structure because that sounds quite logical. Practice is the best way to improve and therefore do more essays and post them here for our feedbacks.
OP king jane 2 / 5 3  
Aug 18, 2013   #6
Thaks Dumi,
sry for late reply.u r gentle,not rude at all,and the strcture really helps me a lot.and i post another one ~help~~

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