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'Getting what is different' - TOEFL:People are never satisfied with what they have.



djanat 19 / 25  
Mar 16, 2010   #1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more or something different. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Looking around us helps to see and notice what we have. Unfortunately, people are never satisfied with what they have. They always want something more or something different. It is hard to explain why people behave like that, but research and studies reveal some factors that have a huge role on this.

The first facture is the jealousy. The jealousy is human. All people have this sentiment, but it differs from one person to another. Jealousy makes people look what others have. It keeps them from thinking about what they have. Jealousy also makes people to wish or to seek to have something more , something different or better than what others have. For example there are some friends that are jealous of each other. Each time they try to get some thing different to compare it with what the other has.

In addition, some people like to be the best. This feeling of superiority makes of them unsatisfied people. They always want to have something different, something new to look better than others. As an example, there are a lot of female actresses who are not satisfied with their face. They want to be perfect at all, so they go throw plastic surgery to make some changes in their faces.

Another factor to explain why people are never satisfied with what they have is they believe that all what they have is bad. It is a negative feeling that makes people unsatisfied with what they have. They think that all things different is good. This kind of people can not success in their lives, because even they get what is different according to them , they will be unsatisfied.

If the non satisfaction leads to a better thing, it will be awesome. People should not be impulsive by changing what they have, because some time we change something bad to something worst.

please give your point of view for this essay . thanks

EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Mar 17, 2010   #2
Great intro paragraph!

The first factor is the jealousy. The jealousy ...

Jealousy also makes people to wish or to seek to have something more, something different or better than what others have. --- very good!!

This feeling of superiority makes of them unsatisfied people. ---- technically it is correct to write it the way you had it, but it is clearer this way.

As an example, there are a lot of female actresses and male actors who are not satisfied with their faces .

They want to be perfect, at all so they go through plastic surgery to make some changes in their faces.

If the non dissatisfaction leads to a better thing, it will be awesome. People should not be impulsive by changing what they have, because some time we change something bad to something worse .--- hahahah I love the ending.

Very good, your skill is easy to notice. I can tell you worked hard to master English. These mistakes are minor.


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