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IELTS - A gift can be in any form!



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Nov 12, 2013   #1
topic: A gift (such as camera , soccer ball , or an animal)can contribute to a child's development. What gift would u give to help a child develop? why?Use reason and specific examples to support your choice.

A gift to any one is given to greet or make some one feel especial, that how important they are to us, especially I'd rather say Particularly when parents are giving What their children or grandchildren. Sometimes gifts may be better substitute by presents are given to motivate as a reward when a young one get good marks in exam Full stop? so Consequently as he or she learn thrive to achieve marks in same spirit as they did previously, while other time it is I think must be plural they are given occasionally such as for Christmas or birthdays.

A gift can be better to express possibility by could be might be in any form, for instance it can be an interactive material through which a child can learn the concept of colors, shapes, sizes etc, Full stop Another example is or it can be sets related to some profession like doctor set, or a tool set, and also a coloring material like painting, poster color or crayons, which may be provoking towards a thinking to become a doctor and mechanical engineer or an artist. Even a kitchen set is important when a child plays with it, I believe it helps to understand them how to help their moms in the kitchen as well as they can be the future chef. I believe that a child should be given a gift, which help them to improve their thinking habitsmaybe skills, make them understanding towards their environment and also it should have some purpose of learning. Another example is a pet animal pets, like a cat or a hamster, as a mother I know, it helps a lot regarding taking care of towards I think no need other it helps a young one to generate some sympathy, kindness inside them, they learn that there are other creatures to look after, as well as they learn more about that specific things related to that pet for example the feeding time, the changing effect of weather, how to protect them, the vaccination schedules etc, and how they live. It can also be a football or a cricket bat to play with the other friends during outdoor timings which also help them to learn the concept of sharing and manners to be a part of teem and how to be good to others and coping up difficult situation while playing. There are other toys which are copy of many things used by elder in daily routine like laptop, and mobiles they are filled with the interactive sounds which helps a child to learn also as well as satisfy the urge to use what their elders have.

Pahan 1 / 1824  
Nov 14, 2013   #2
A gift to any one is given to greet or make some one feel especial,

.... make one feel special

A gift to any one is given to greet or make some one feel especial, that how important they are to us, especially when parents are giving their children or grandchildren.

This sentence is too long and poorly organized. Write shorter sentences with one sentence per idea. Otherwise they would have less clarity.

Sometimes gifts are given to motivate as a reward

....gift is a reward and the purpose of giving someone a gift is to motivate.
I think you need to pay attention to organizing your ideas because that weakness I find throughout your essay. It is important to arrange your ideas logically and then present them to flow in a more organized manner.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Nov 21, 2013   #3
However, sometimes I have seen some play material in the market, which I do not find good for the growing kids, for instance a gun which are these days have their plastic bullets with it, are harmful as well as can illicit aggressiveness in a child, another example are fighting games which generates violence in a young lad.

You write very long sentences and they actually get you carried away at the end of the sentence. Try to avoid such lengthy sentences. They make the reader bored too.

However, certain toys in the market are not good for the growing kids. For instance, although guns with plastic bullets is a trendy toy these days, they may nurture aggressiveness and ruthlessness in children. Further, online games that are based on fighting can make children more violent in nature.


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