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Gifted by nature women plays a significant role in bringing a new child



Redtape 4 / 17  
Nov 23, 2012   #1
Gifted by nature women plays a significant role in bringing a new child (life) into the world but unfortunately there are some aspects that she need to consider before becoming a wonderful mother.

Majority of men think it's women's job to decide and weather she want a baby or not. But if you see the amount of stress and competition she experiences both at home and workplace it's not fair on men if they walk away by simply saying "it's not my responsibility".These sort of non supporting statements not only makes the women insecure but she may also feel insecure and disrespectful, resulting in emotional breakdown which can not only cause an extreme decisions like early termination or in some cases chances of ending the marital relationship as well.

However in recent times as both the genders are getting equally recognized by each other we can see there is some change in this trend.Now a days both the men and women are understanding each other and respecting each other views at least in important decisions like this.

Concisely in my opinion men should also share the responsibility by supporting their partner in every possible way they can, which can allow women not only cherish those moments (during pregnancy) but also allows to understand the unconditional love of their husband.

My questions:-

Is it alright to have a short second paragraph?

I've used a word "Concisely " which I believe a good word. Please comment on this.

can I use parenthesis statements in between?

joythblessy 86 / 266  
Nov 25, 2012   #2
Hai...

Please add the full question before starting your essay. Even one question can ask in different ways. Ex: opinion, discussion, and so on...

:Now a days :- it is one word, Nowadays

:3rd para is only 2 sentances. Too short, put more words..

:I like your conclusion..


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