plays(s + agreement issu, remember that singular noun always use singular verb and plural as well)
an enormous role in Indonesia. This is because
activity can offer the benefit
ofcolocation issu the corect colocation is for
employment opportunities ...
Subsequently, this results in strengthening ...
there is no verb in this sentence
Taking Baba Rafi as an example, at this present time, it has successfully ...
this is confusing sentence did you mean: take it Baba Rfi as sample, it has been successfully growing up and it had more 1,200 outlets.
I cannot give more advise because it better when you directly revise
1. s +v agreement
3. use conjunction to make smoothly writing.
break a leg bro