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Government budgets should be spent on public transportation or road and highways - Toefl


sandipsinh 37 / 90 3  
Mar 4, 2014   #1
Transportation means have indeed made world smaller. Good transportation facilitate easy and convenient travel. When matter is of transportation condition of platforms wherein these means of transportation are used are equally important that's why government should allot budget to maintain roads and highways. However myriad transportation means are available, but among all of them buses, trains and subways have earned more popularity among common men for several reasons as such government must spend money on improving public transportation. Further, I will be appending my views on the reasons of spending money on development of public transportation.

Buses,trains and subways are economical mean of transportation for all income group people therefore maintaining them is essential. Currently in blustering cities like Mumbai and New York, people are highly depend on subways, buses and trains for commuting. Besides accelerating inflation has highly affected the fare of all means of transportation. In such a scenario small pockets cannot afford air ways fare therefore to facilitate lower to higher - middle class people government must keep public transportation highly functional. It also help tourist who come to see a new country. Train can connect two zone of country in few hours that makes it most demanding by the populace. Having effective public transportation can deemed as asset of any country as it is for the benefit of public.

Secondly, Public transportation is used maximum world wide. Entire city would be depended on this for minor to major purpose like this transportation help many business to deliver goods in time at minimal rates and mails and posts are delivered by the use of trains. Public transportation fetch need of government as well as civilians. In city like Mumbai, student to vice president of any company would not hesitate to travel in local train or subway due to heavy traffic on the roads, which delay their arrival at desired destination. Seemingly, facilities are their but due to the improper management and use of road and highways, their usage is avoided. Government must also implement strict rules to using public transportation for safety purpose.

Buses and other automobiles are highly depended on roads and highways as such government must not ignore their effect on transportation. Roads and highways should be maintain or renovate time to time for smooth travel. As preferences of people include use of roads as well as public transportation, it is imperative to keep them in appropriate condition.

Government must divide its budget considering preferences of all income group people and growth of country, but daily used facilities must get higher priorities as such I discern that government should spend money on maintaining public transport.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 5, 2014   #2
Include the prompt in your essay for us to understand what it really requires from you.

Good transportation facilitates easy and convenient travel.

When matter is of transportation condition of platforms wherein these means of transportation are used are equally important that's why government should allot budget to maintain roads and highways

This sentence is too complicated and lengthy. Simply paraphrase your prompt to introduce the background of the issue. Avoid constructing too complex sentence structures because your reader would be tired of reading them.
OP sandipsinh 37 / 90 3  
Mar 5, 2014   #3
Dumi and Pahan Thanks ...
Pahan i trying to fallow this structure but in time constraint end up drafting my essay like this besides..
I am confuse about body para content - you mean to say that i must directly mention my point of explanation in 1st sentence of any paragraph and then provide my details or examples.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Mar 5, 2014   #4
It's not so complicated. First start the body para with the reason. Then give one specific example to support your reason. Stick to one reason per para and one example per reason. That is the only way you can handle time effectively.

Also, have a very clear statement to express your opinion in the introduction. What you have done is pretty vague.
Phuong Thao 2 / 2  
Mar 5, 2014   #5
you need add for example which the essay is better than


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