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Government: Conserve endangered species or human being is more important. Both views and opinion?



nguyenhoangtung 1 / 1  
Jul 8, 2020   #1

the interests of human or animals protection



In recent years, human beings have suffered from many urgent problems : diseases, environmental problems, etc so national and local authorities face an ethical dilemma if they allocate resource to wildlife protection. While many people consider that the interests of human welfare should be a government priority, I agree with those who argue that steps must be taken to prevent the further loss of animal.

On the one hand, dealing with issue which exert its detrimental effect on human is high on the government agenda. Firstly, government should spend their budget on this healthcare system. As a matter of fact, hospitals have been overwhelmed by ill patients as a result of Covid-19 pathogens having injected millions of people as well as killing 2% of those infected. Hence, although maintaining stable health system is of great expense, national budget should be most prioritised with a view to ensuring good public health. For instance, almost countries are greatly investing in scientific research such as simulation of these viruses to find a cure and develop antibiotics for this risky disease. Secondly, in terms of education, nations and individuals must place the importance on tackling education problems. Since education serves as a remedy for heightening people' intellect, the number of illiterate people must be low as much as possible. In poor countries, especially regions suffering from extreme weather, students are unlikely to be given permission to go to school due their financial burden. government, as a consequence, should build up educational infrastructures and support people with destitute living by fully charging tuition fees for them to encourage their children to follow formal education.

On the other hand, I concur with those who argue that nations and citizens also need to conserve species which are on the brink of extinction. The red list of endangered species is increasing every year.If wildlife extinction continues, then humans may face an ecological crisis which impacts their own survival. For example, if the practice of whaling by using electrical pulse fishing is not halted, the ecosystems of our oceans will be altered forever, affecting the fish stocks on which so many communities depend for living. Secondly, conserving wild animals means protecting the habitats in which they live, such as rainforests and wetlands. Without preserving animals, habitat destruction would occur, triggering climate change which pose an imminent

to our food productivity and environment.
To recapitulate, endangered species must be preserved by countries and humans as these animals play an integral role in the development of human beings. National and local authorities should combine expenses on both protection of animals as well as human population

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15388  
Jul 9, 2020   #2
Oh boy! 434 words, you sure can type. You type pretty fast. However, you do not type within the limitations of a 40 minute essay that requires the student to complete a clear, concise, and properly developed simple essay presentation. You wrote a research paper when a simple opinion paper is required. For a task 2 essay, you should not be aiming to write more than 250-290 words. The idea is to quickly explain your opinion, without making it unnecessarily long. The examiner wants to see how well you can express yourself in English, you don't have to over explain, just explain enough.

Your essay does not use enough pronoun variations to clearly indicate the 3 paragraph reasoning presentations:
- Public point of view 1
- Public point of view 2
- Personal opinion

The overall presentation does not discuss both opinions in the manner required by the prompt. It skips on the proper point of view presentations. It is incomplete in presentation style. You should make sure that you are using the correct format when discussing this multiple point of view essay. The focus should be on improving your GRA score through the pronoun usage indicating public opinion presentations. Using a controlled word presentation.

While other teachers will tell you to simply keep writing until you run out of time, I teach my students the opposite. Control the word count, focus on the quality of your presentation, and the clarity of your discussion. An extra long essay such as this one will always have more errors in it that will keep pulling down your overall score. That is what you will avoid when you write a simple essay of proper length. You always get a better score with a concise essay, never with an extra long discussion presentation.
OP nguyenhoangtung 1 / 1  
Jul 10, 2020   #3
@Holt
Could you explain me more about pronoun variations ? Great thanks


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