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IELTS; Government should spend money on ARTs, not only on public services


Jennifer Zhang 9 / 27  
Jul 27, 2011   #1
Some people argue that the government should spend money on public services and facilities , but not on the arts. Do you agree or disagree?

As people have raised their democratic awareness in recent years, they are caring more about how the tax expenditure is distributed by the government. As a result, some people suggest that the tax money should be allocated to publically beneficial services instead of arts. However, from my perspective, I think arts are supposed to be included in the government's investment as well.

Admittedly, the government should give priority to public services and facilities. This is because the government plays the role of a leader among citizens, which should discharge the responsibility of making optimal use of the tax money to keep society safe and stable. Simultaneously, public services such as education system or medical care can meet people's basic demand of survival, security and knowledge, thus making them feel comfortable, which can lower the crime rate. Therefore, public services and facilities should be given adequate attention by the authorities to maintain social stability.

On the other hand, I believe arts should by no means been disregarded by the government. Individually, arts can enrich people's cultural lives. Currently, people are increasingly occupied with their work and studies due to the stiff competition. Consequently, they require various entertainment such as music, movies or books to them ease their minds and release pressure. Without arts, people would be at risk of suffering psychological problems.

From the point of the local community, funding arts is beneficial to the local cultural and economic development. Cultural heritage constitutes an essential part of arts. This means preserving local arts may promote the preservation of the local cultural heritage, which not only helps the local people have a sense of belonging but also contributes to the booming local tourism industry. In this view, arts serve cultural and economic purposes .

With those arguments in mind, I would conclude that public services and facilities are an integral part of the government expenditure. At the same time, the authorities should also respect the value of arts which are individually and socially advantageous.

aleafsun 9 / 19  
Jul 27, 2011   #2
Jennifer, you've done a pretty good job here!

There is just a little suggestion to the ending sentence.
I might rephrase it as "At the same time, the authorities should also respect the value of arts on its individual and social advantages."
OP Jennifer Zhang 9 / 27  
Jul 28, 2011   #3
aleafsun

Hi, aleaf,Thanks:) Are you preparing for ielts too? Good luck!
aleafsun 9 / 19  
Jul 28, 2011   #4
No problem! Wish both of us would get ideal scores~ ^^
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Jul 29, 2011   #5
As people have raised their democratic awareness in recent years, they beginning to care more about how the tax revenue is distributed by the government. ----Your sentence was not incorrect, but this way is a little better.

Simultaneously, public services such as education system or medical care can meet people's basic demand of survival, security and knowledge, thus making them feel comfortable, which can lower the crime rate. ---wow, very good sentence!

From the point perspective of the local community, funding arts...
You don't need much help! Your English is great...

:-)
OP Jennifer Zhang 9 / 27  
Jul 30, 2011   #6
EF_Kevin
Thx,Kevin:) I want to ask you a grammar question here. The two sentences are as follows.
1、Thus, a great number of people firmly believe that we will keep up this upward trend, achievingand achieve higher goals in the next 90 years

2、Without a guideline on protecting the environment,the firm would still consume a vast amount of energy which constitutes a large part of its operational costs, beingwhich would become a hurdle to the economic development.

In both sentences,I want to use"ing"to express the results of the former sentence. For example, I mean higher goals are the result of keeping the upward trend.Could you tell me why it's not proper to use "ing"in the two sentences.

Thank you!

Jennifer
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,335 129  
Aug 2, 2011   #7
Thus, a great number of people firmly believe that we will keep up this upward trend, achieving higher goals in the next 90 years.---This way is correct.

Without a guideline on protecting the environment, and a vast amount of energy would still be consumed, constituting a large part of its operational costs, which would become a hurdle to the economic development.

These two ways above are correct. In the second one, the energy is doing the "constituting."

:-)


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