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The governments should impose a high tax on fast foods or not. Disagree or degree


camchi 1 / -  
Nov 5, 2019   #1

making people to avoid fast foods



Nowadays, the question of whether the government should command or not a higher tax on fast food that has been receiving a great deal of public attention. Because of this kind of these foods cause humans dangerous diseases such as cardiovascular and fatty liver disease. However, this core of this concern is not advantages but what is significant will be the downsides.

There are several reasons why the government should burden with a big tax on junk foods. First, increasing a high tax will make fast foods that are unaffordable to low-income people. This means that they would frequently prepare for their meals at home than buying these foods, which is conducive to them about their finance and health. Second, with a ton of waste from fast foods like plastics pipe, plastics cup, and tissues discharge into the environment excessively, which intensifies global warming. Clearly, by this policy, the government reduces a part of rubbish from these plastics products, the environment will more fresh and less pollution in the future.

On the other hand, some benefits of fast foods bring to people that can not overlook. First, some people who are busy with work and study choose fast foods since they do not have alternatives. This means that those foods help them saving much time to eat ordinary meals without taking a lot of time to cook the dish. Second, in the fast-food industry in developed countries like Singapore, Japan provides a significant economic. The consumption of those foods can contribute boost to the economy of their nation. In conclusion, raising taxes leads to not the best decision to solve this issue. By considering all the cons and pros of fast foods, the government should educate knowledge citizens about healthy knowledge rather than that policy.

roswita116 10 / 24 10  
Nov 7, 2019   #2
@camchi
Hi. I would like to give you some feedback about your writing.😁

First of all, your introduction including the general statement and paraphrase viewpoints which makes readers easy to understand. However, I would like to suggest that you should state your specific question which is you completely agree or disagree in the end of your introduction.

For the body paragraph, the examples for your 2nd paragraph which is the government should impose more tax on fast food are logical. However, for the 3rd paragraph, on my own opinion, you use "on the other hand" that means you are going to state a different point of view. But I still read the same point of view that is followed by paragraph 2 and I don't know what is the relevant between imposing more tax on fast food and saving time. If you have spare time, I suggest you can try to read some sample answers that may help you to acquire some better ideas.

Last but not least, your conclusion should writing into the new paragraph and never ever add any new idea into your conclusion. (Ex:government should educate....)

In your summary, you should restate your opinion(I strongly agree/disagree...) and restate 2 reasons (because...) Simple and easy to read.

Hope it would help.😁😁


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