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Governments should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and develop



gurumonk 2 / 1  
Aug 30, 2013   #1
Governments should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Scientific research and development help contribute to nations development and to help man kind. But several researches in the past have proved devastating. I agree with the authors statement that government should place restriction on research and development. Restriction should be laid upon researchs which have deleterious effect on nature and human.

In the early 17th and 18th century, several diseases would go undetected and without cure. People during that era thought diseases were a curse or its punishment from god. Black plaque in England during the 16th century exemplifies how disease would result into many people dieing. But nowadays plaques have practically vanished not to say that viral infections like H1N1 still exists. If it wasn't for the research scholar, these plagues would have killed thousand more men.

During the 1940, scientists started experimenting on nuclear science which had tremendous power. This nuclear power can be used in generating electricity with really high efficiency but rather it became a power weapon. Hiroshima and Nagasaki attack is an example of the devastating effects of some researchs. The recent chemical posion attack by Syrian government on its own people is yet another example how some scientific research can be harmful. Government, therefore must keep in check the researchs of these kind and put restriction on them.

Research and development should be carried out with mankind in mind. Government should restrict researches on mass destruction. Research in medicine, renewable energy sources and like-wise should always be encouraged by government.

niesaysi 16 / 281  
Sep 2, 2013   #2
nation development-- nation's(put an apostrophe)
man kind-- mankind(one word)

be laid upon researches

But several researches in the past have proved devastating.

-- You mention the term " proved". Now, how would you make the readers believe to that, since it's a strong stand? This is a generalized sentence which lacks specific supporting details.

People during that era thought diseases were a curse or it is punishment from god

Black plaque in England during the 16th century exemplified ( should be past tense) how ..

But nowadays plaques would have practically vanished not to ...

In relation to this sentence,

But several researches in the past have proved devastating.

As what I said, it's a generalization so you better place it on the third para since you have enumerated there all the details supporting it..

keep in check of these kinds of researches and put restriction on them.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Sep 17, 2013   #3
... Very good introduction :)

In the early 17th and 18th century, several diseases would go undetected and without cure.

.... why didn't you use past tense?
In the early 17th and 18th century, several diseases went undetected and without cure
Excellent writing. Wish you good luck and I feel you can easily go for a great score :)


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