There was a gradual downward trend in the percentage of English teachers in Ontario

Writing Task 1 - Percentage of first-year teachers with regular teaching jobs by year of graduation

The graph shows the information about the percentage of english and french first-year teacher from 2001 to 2007 based on graduation year in Ontario. Overall, it can be see that there was a gradual downward trend in the percentage of english teachers, but the number of french teachers increased slightly. And then, the percentage of french teachers dominates over a six-year period.

According to the graph, there was a dramatic fall in the wide range of english teachers, while plenty of french teachers went up and down between 2001 and 2003.

From 2003 to 2005, english and french teachers have same graphic, there were a gradual rise from 40 percent to 45 percent and 68 percent to 70 percent in english and french teachers respectively.

2005 saw an extreme fall in the number of english teachers, whereas the number of french teachers fluctuated. In 2007, plenty of english teachers hit a high point at 74 percent.

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Hi Mardian,

Here's my analysis towards your report summary of IELTS task 1. I hope this would be helpful.

... about the percentage of english and frenchEnglish and French first-year teachers from 2001 to 2007...
... trend in the percentage of englishEnglish teachers, but the number of frenchFrench teachers increased slightly.
And thenThen, the percentage of french teachers dominatesFrench teachers (...) dominated the trendover a six-yearin the end of the period.

As you can see, your essay suffered from punctuation and capitalization problems. It might look simple but punctuation and capitalization also one of the essential criteria in IELTS band descriptors from IELTS.org. I hope you can learn from your mistake and compose a better essay next time. Good luck :)