Writing task 1: GRAPH CHART ABOUT OVERSEAS VISITORS

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Graph analysis task

TOPIC: The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors (in thousands) to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Version 1
The given chart illustrates the figures of foreign visitors to three different holiday destinations in a European nation from 1987 to 2007.

As can be seen, the coast was the most interesting place, with the figure witnessing the highest number of visitors during this period, except in 2002, when the lakes overtook its leading position and became the most popular tourist attraction.

In 1987-2007, the number of visitors to the coast increased by varying degrees, and then it rose significantly until 2007 to reach its peak of 75,000. There was a dramatic rise in the figure for the lakes from 10,000 in 1987 to 40,000 in 1997, before hitting its peak of about 75,000 in 2002, followed by a sudden drop to 50,000 5 years later. By contrast, the number of overseas visitors to the mountains fluctuated between 20,000 and 30,000 from 1987 to 1997 and then rose slightly to 35,000 in 2007.

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You should write 4 paragraphs
The number of foreign tourists to three tourist spots in a European country => in three regions of a European nation.
Overall, the figure- It is clear that the coast: just use either in overall graph.
Ex: Overall, the number of visitors increase in each place between 1987 to 2007.The lakes are expected to see the dramatic changes in its overseas visitors.

In 1987, the coast, the mountains and the lakes had about 40,000, 20,000 and 10,000 visitors respectively. => In 1987, the coast was visited by 40,000 visitors, compared to 20,000 people of the mountains and 10,000 tourists of the lakes.

You should choose the oustanding ideas to write and refer to the ielts documents on the Internet.