Use at least 2 sentences for the summary overview. You will get an impressive summary score if you use 3 sentences. Separate sentence ideas gain more points in this instance. You cannot expect to get a good preliminary score when you present a run-on sentence such as this at the very start of the presentation. You should focus on sentence clarity, which is not achieved when you write long, compressed idea sentences.
Asian countries living in the city
Singular v. Plural error. Countries is plura, city is singular. The reference should be in plural form as well, cities.
has increased significantly
You cannot say this. 2040 is a predictor, it is not reported as fact in the image. You should stop trying to compress your information, it leads to misleading references that will cause unnecessary errors in your LR, GRA, and C+C scores.