spending on mobile phones and landline services
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The graph illustrates the average yearly spending on mobile phone, national and overseas landline services in a period between 2001 and 2010. The units are measured in dollars.
The graph illustrates the average yearly spending on mobile phone, national and overseas landline services in a period between 2001 and 2010. The units are measured in dollars.
In common, the annual expenditure of national fixed-line services experienced a downward trend while the opposite was true for cellular phone spending. Also, the figure of overseas landline services was relatively stable during the period.
As regards the first year of the period, the yearly national landline payment was ranked as the highest among other services with $700. However, in 2006, its figure dropped considerably by roughly $200 which equaled the annual handphone spending. Since consumers gradually spent more for mobile phones in the following 4 years, its expenditure grew significantly from $200 to $500. Meanwhile, the international fixed-line consumption increased incrementally from around $250 to roughly $320 before declining by $20 in 2004. Then, it remained stable at 300$ until the fifth year of the period.
In 2006, domestic landline services became less popular with a drop of $100 in its annual spending. On the contrary, cell phones were increasingly consumed which induced its payment to rise from $500 to over $700. Additionally, the amount of money paid for overseas fixed-line services was unchanged with around $300 throughout.
