The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria

The line chart illustrates how much money was spent on books in four different countries examined from 1995 to 2005.
Overall, there was an upward trend in the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Australia, with Germany witnessing the most gradual increase throughout the timescales given.
Evidently, the expenditure on books in Germany started at 80 million dollars, after which it witnessed a small change before going up to the highest in 2005. Meanwhile, Australia spent roughly 30 million dollars in 1995 which it observed an ever-increasing trend to surpass the figure for France in the final year of the surveyed period.
Approximately 60 million dollars was seen in the figure for France, with a growth to nearly 80 million dollars in 2005. Followed by the budget for books in France, the figure for Italy began at around 50 million dollars and experienced a slight fluctuation to grow up, making it the lest common in the year 2005.

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I congratulate you on writing more than just the minimum word count in your essay. That is not to say that the analytical essay was successfully written though. At this point, all you did was avoid failing to writing test based on the word count technicality. The formatting is still all wrong and the sentences are badly formed, endangering your TA and GRA scores in the process. Please remember that the task 1 essay should have at least 3 paragraphs written and clearly separated by pressing the enter key on your laptop/PC/mobile device. The way the essay looks now, it is just one long paragraph, which will negatively affect your final score. Clearly separate your paragraphs so that the examiner will immediately see that you wrote at least 3 sentences for every paragraph. That way you will have a better scoring assessment when he previews your presentation.

Thank you so much for your feedback!! Though, I still do not comprehend what are bad sentences formation, can you explain some?

your writing task 1 is really good at some points however there are some sentences with poor formation in your essay and i am willing to suggest some improvements. Firstly, from my point of view, the phrase "throughout the timescales given" is awkward and unclear so using a simpler and more precise phrase would improve clarity. Secondly, you should make sure comparisons are clear and logical, especially when discussing trends over time. that's it thanks for reading my feedback, i wish you can make a improvement