initiating from the year 1980s.
Incorrect sentence structure. Year is singular, indicating one year (1980). 1980+s is plural indicating more than one year. GRA deduction.
almost all examined activities
Activities should have been enumerated either in the summary overview or the trending statement to complete the prior information sharing for the summarized information portion of the presentation.
As can be seen,
The reader cannot see anything. They are not going to have a copy of the image. Always refer to the information without a placement or position inference.
the statistic
You are comparing more than 1 set of information. The word should be in plural form (statistics)
While the information presentation is acceptable, it is the incorrect sentence structure throughout the essay report that will pull down the final score.