The graph and table shows the amount of water used for various purposes

water use worldwide and water consumption

The given line and table chart illustrate the amount of water used for various purposes including Agriculture, industrial and domestic use around the world from 1900 to 2000 and water intake in brazil and Congo in 2000.

Looking from an overview perspective, it is readily apparent that water used by all 3 sectors experienced an upward trend over 100 years surveyed, while, congo which was the country lacked clean water for people's life.

Taking a glance at the line chart, between 1900 and 1960, the data of water consumed for industrial and domestic went up slighly to approximately 200〖km〗^3 and 100〖km〗^3 respectively, while, that of agriculture rose significantly from 500〖km〗^3 to 1000〖km〗^3. In the next 40 years that of industrial continued to increase about 1500〖km〗^3. Similarly, water consumption for domestic went up and took the minority with about 500〖km〗^3. At the same time, that of agriculture witnessed an unpredictable rise to about 3000〖km〗^3 and took the lead. In terms of the table, the population of Brazil was 176 million, being 170.8 million more than that of Congo with 5.2 million. Whereas Brazil had irrigated land acreage is 26500〖km〗^2, comparing with Congo with 100〖km〗^2. Furthermore, Congo which was a country lacked clean water with only 8m^2 water consumption for each person, being less than that of Brazil with 359m^2.

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