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Writing Task 1, the graphs below provide information on global population in diffrent regions



Delvisyendra 6 / 7  
Oct 30, 2016   #1
The breakdown of information regarding population growth in different regions as well as developing and developed states during three centuries from 1800 to 2100 years, measured by millions of people. Overall, it is really important to notice that the highest inhabitation of developing regions will reach a peak dramatically in 2040.

Initially, in the first year trend of developing regions seadily started at one biliions of people. The growth of population always experince a tremendous upward in the next following years. Noticeably, a high rise was seen in the line of developing regions reached seven billion of residents in 2015. In the same period, advanced regions appeared which had number of populations more than less 1300 millions.

Eventually, by mantaining a resctriction of inhabitation growth, as the results, it will be predicted that population of developed regions will expericence a similar number in 2040. While this year will be largest population of developing states during whole period. Interestingly, a sharply decline will be followed in the last year even will reach the same level in the present time.


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abangabul93 15 / 27  
Oct 30, 2016   #2
Hello @dalvis, I got some suggestions for your writing:

... to notice that the highest inhabitation (INHABITANT) of developing regions ...

Initially, in the first year (THE) trend of developing regions seadily (STEADILY) started at one ...
The growth of population always experince (HAS EXPERIENCED) a tremendous upward in the next following years (SINCE 1800).
In the same period, advanced (DEVELOPED) regions appeared which ...

... a similar number in 2040. While (, WHILE) this year will be (THE) largest population of ...


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