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Writing Task 1: Global Population Figures & Figures for Urban Populations in Different World Regions


asmaraj96 9 / 11  
Oct 30, 2016   #1
The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions.

The line graph and bars-chart give information about global population rates and the average number of urban population in different world areas. Overall, the global population would continue to rise gradually until over around four decades and the majority of the people would be living in developing countries, while the people lived in the developed countries indicated will be stable as the previous periods-situation.

According to the given data, the number of people in the world stood at 1 billion in the first period, 1800. Then, there is a gradual increase of population from the first period to almost one and a half century and then rise sharply reaching the top point approximately 8 billion after a century. After over a half century, the trend experiences a sharp decline until reaching 6 billion points.

Furthermore, developing countries has a huge number of rate population globally, while develop countries are stable during 35 years. A population number of developing countries increased gradually over three decades, from 2015 to 2040. (169 words)




IvanMS027 43 / 56 9  
Oct 30, 2016   #2
Hi asmaraj96. Here are my suggestions for you.

1. The line graph and bars-chart give information about global population rates ...
(you should write the years in this paragraph -- the range of years covered in the charts) .

2. Furthermore, developing countries haswill be predicted to have a huge number (...) while developdeveloped countries are stable during 35 years
(you can write down the data of the number of people staying at developed country which remains at ) .

I hope it can be useful for you.
Goodluck.
AhmadNashran 9 / 13 1  
Oct 30, 2016   #3
Then, there is(was) a gradual increase (...) one and a half centuryies and then will rise sharply reaching ...
After over a half- century, the trend predicted will experiences a sharp decline until reachingwhich will reach until 6 billion points.

Furthermore, developing countries predicted willhas(have) a huge number of rate populations globally, while develop countries arewill be stable during 35 years.
... of developing countries will increased gradually over ...
According to the picture, the given time are past and future. in my opinion, you have to divide them which the past and future pattern are. and pay attention with the quantifier noun agreement.


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