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The pie graphs provide information about the results of a survey about boy's and girl's prefered culture and leisure activities. Even though, some noticable similarities between the two genders have been observed, overall the differences were much more significant.
It is clear to see that, he boy's favourite activity was the playing of computer games, with approximately 34% of them sharing that opinion. The computer games were closely followed by the basketball and soccer, which recieved respectively 26 adn 17% of all boys votes. Both listening to music and skateboarding experienced similar results, they were both practised by about 10 % of the asked boys. The lowest result was observed in the reading proportion, where only 2% of the asked boys said they were interested in that activity.
The most popular activity across the girls was the dancing with proportion of about 27%. The reading was found to be interesting by 1/5 of the girlds, whereas the computer games and the netball were very close to each other, scoring results of respectevely 16 adn 15%. As in the boys sector, the listenign to music attracted 10% of the girls and it was surpassed by the gymnastics with only 1 % difference .
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prefered preferred culture and leisure activities.
, some noticable noticeable similarities
It is clear to see that, t he boy's favourite (...) approximately 34%
of them sharing that opinion (I did not get the point).
Dear Lola, you are good in term of grammar and the writing's flow. However, I remind you that writing task 1 is not only about mention the data one by one, but also comparing data in order to easy the readers understand what the chart tells. you must compare between charts' boys and woman. for example, you can say that there was same proportion between boys and girls in term of Listening to music, which was10%. Furthermore, your introduction does not describe the chart generally. you need to analyze finding the interesting statement which illustrates whole charts, maybe you could mention that indoor activity is more popular than outdoor activity in both sexes since it had the biggest proportion. Finally, please notice your spelling, you did mistakes