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Being healthy is not an easy task today, but there are always ways to manage this



ibe13 36 / 38  
Oct 31, 2016   #1
Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

Nowadays, healthy lifestyle is a dream each people. Although some are skeptical to do healthy ways because of advertising and technology, others are more likely to against this notion. They believe the way of health can be found more conveniently in this era. I personally tend to the latter opinion because many facilities can be used to get people's health. However, it depends on themselves whether they want to or not.

Admittedly, advertisement is one of the key factors in which people, nowadays, are very difficult to do something making them healthy. This is because advertising can influence people's environment and habit. For instance, most of junk food companies utilize advertising to be closer to individuals in all aged levels. Thus, we can see junk food advertisement dominates more than others and also people are more and more drawn to consume that food. Another reason is many offers to do passive activities such as computer, the Internet, television programs, and games. According to latest study, 3 in 4 young adults in developing countries spend their time about a half in a day sitting down to access Internet or playing games, while 55 percent of children, also, do what young adults do.

In another perspective, people, basically, are facilitated to live better with many health tools. This is because both the government and investors around the world have already provided sports facilities to public. Taking Indonesia as an example, the government introduces the regulation about one hometown, one public health. This rule has been released since 2014 to encourage citizens spending their day off to exercise more in that area. In addition, many markets offer healthy food because they realize that many people begin to change their diet to healthy meals. For instance, in my country, most of markets provide healthy food opposite the entrance to pay costumers' attention and buy this.

To sum up, I believe although many difficulties which people face to be healthier, there are always ways which can be found. I suggest that people should try to get health because healthy lifestyle is the most crucial in our lives.

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ichanpants89 16 / 742  
Oct 31, 2016   #2
Hi Ilham,
Here's my analysis towards your IELTS writing task 2 essay. I hope you can follow through.

1st paragraph:
- NowadaysThese days , healthy lifestyle is a dream for each peoplemost people.(do not overgeneralize an idea if you want to reach band 6 or above.)

- Although some are skeptical to dohave healthy ways because of...
- They believe the way of healthhealthy lifestyle can be found more conveniently in this era.
- .... can be used to get people's healthfor making people healthy.
- ... whether they want toit or not.

4th paragraph:
- To sum up, I believe although many difficulties which people face to be healthierdespite difficulties in achieving a healthy lifestyle, I would argue that there are always ways which can be found.

- I suggest that people should try to get healthbe healthy by having a healthy lifestyle because healthy lifestyle is the most crucial thing in our livespeople's life .

Hope this helps :)
OP ibe13 36 / 38  
Oct 31, 2016   #3
Aloha ichanpants89, thank you for your suggestion, I hope you want to double check my essay. Here is my editing;

These days, healthy lifestyle is one of the crucial matters around the world. Although some are skeptical to have healthy ways ...
... many facilities can be used to gain people's health.
... whether they want it or not.

To sum up, despite difficulties in achieving a healthy lifestyle, I would argue that there are always ways ...
I suggest that people should try to provide their health because individual's health is the most crucial in people's lives.


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