''Help me with my process: How bricks are produced''

Hello everyone! I'm a new member and I've just started writing task 1. It would be better if someone can help to check and contribute some ideas for my essay. Thanks so much :)

The chart shows how to produce bricks and deliver them to the customers.

Overall, there are seven stages of producing bricks beginning with clay excarvation and ending with shipping bricks to the market.

Firstly, clay is dug with a digger. The pieces are filtered by using a metal grid and smaller pieces are picked up by the roller. The next step is mixing sand and water into clay. After shaping the bricks by using a mould or a wire cutter, they are dried by oven for 24 to 48 hours.

Those bricks are moved to a kiln which devided into 2 compartments. With the first one, they are kept at a moderate temperature ( 200C - 980C) and then they are burned at a higher temperature (870C - 1300C). Before being packaged, they are given to cooling chamber for 48 to 72 hours. The process concludes with delivery to the consumers.

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@dungpharma97
I suggest looking into finding better transitions for your essay. Avoid straining your sentences by extending unnecessarily the lines. For instance, your last paragraph can confuse readers as to how the two compartments delineate.

You can mention a line that is similar to this:
After the first compartment, the bricks are moved into a cooling chamber.
This will require more alterations for the paragraph, however it will ensure that readers are aware of the shift of environment of the bricks.