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You can't Hide from Government Hacking


faizunaa17 49 / 91  
Dec 1, 2016   #1
Recently, US Department of Justice had established law enforcement that can hack our computer no matter where you are. They think this is very essential, while the privacy advocates say this too much power. This decision make them to be able to plant hacking software on a computer that is disgusting its location. They have a tool prosecutor to use for identifying suspects in financial crimes and child porn cases, who typically use tools to hide their computers' IP addresses.

Because of that, government decision still become pro and contra. Yes, it is true that can boost the power of surveillance, even make the country safer. Unfortunately, plant software on computers is too severe for each human privacy rights. As Andrew Crocker, a staff attorney at the privacy-oriented Electronic Frontier Foundation, said that this rules is more than procedural, even more authorized than before. Until now, some judgers still refuse to approve it, because it too powerful for government in someone privacy area.

Unfortunately, the US government was already hacking US citizens. They argue that it is actually part of investigation in the criminal accidents. According to Crocker, government has been hacking regular people's computer for at least 15 years. There investigated sites visitors related to child pornography. It is actually good, but sometimes they also hack for people that actually not act as bad guys. They argue it is because too hard or nearly to impossible to select one by one, and more easy to spread the hacking tool software randomly.

Holt - / 7,528 2001  
Dec 5, 2016   #2
Mushon, please remember to refer to the country that is being reported about in the summary. When summarizing a report based upon a country or location, it must be mentioned in the summary in order to answer the "Where?" question. All the more it must be mentioned because you are not a resident of the United States of America and therefore, should not make it sound like the ruling in question affects you when it does not. That is a misrepresentation that creates an inaccuracy in your report. Therefore, the U.S. Department of Justice established a law that allowed law enforcement officials to hack U.S. based computers, not wherever a person is.

Pay attention to the tense usage in your essay. Since these reports have already happened and you are merely summarizing the information, the correct tense usage would be "past" tense. In addition to that, your lexical resource is really quite faulty in this essay. For example, "judgers" should be "judge" as you are referring to the position of authority and not an act of judgement. "Plant" should be "planting" since it refers to the act of placing something in a position of use.

It would seem like you have a pretty good grasp of the issue being discussed. The main problem we have here lies in your lexical resource and grammatical accuracy sections. I suggest that you pay particular attention to those sections in your next essays.


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