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Housing, food, health care, education, transportation and other needs in a country


Fauzi17 6 / 6 1  
Jan 21, 2016   #1
The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010

A breakdown of the proportion of the expenses made in housing, food, health care, education, transportation and other needs in a country between 1950 to 2010 is illustrated in the bar charts. Overall, it is important to note that the proportion of consuming food dominated in 2010. While the highest expenditure was experienced by housing, the percentage of health care showed a reverse in 1950.

Moving to a more detailed analysis, the proportion of housing expenditure showed at 72.1% in 1950. The second most expenditure in this country was in consuming food. All other expenditures including health care, education, transportation, and other needs were less than 20% in total.

However, people's expenditure in housing decreased to only 22% while the expenditure for food increased to 34%. Interestingly the expenditure on education decreased over time while the expenses for transportation increased to 14%. All other expenditure in 1950 was only 4.4% which increased to 19.2% in 2010.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 21, 2016   #2
Good work on presenting the facts of the pie charts. Remember, you have to double check the kind of chart being used and describe it properly to the reader. You just need to practice using varied words that mean the same thing, as in the case of "expenditure" in order to show a wider English vocabulary and a better developed thought process in the essay. These will ensure a higher grade consideration for you in the actual test.

... of the expenses made in ON housing, food, health care... between THE YEARS OF 1950 to 2010 is ARE illustrated in the bar PIE charts... proportion of consuming food FOOD EXPENSES dominated... highest expenditure was experienced by ON housing, the percentage of health care EXPENSES showed ... in consuming food. FOOD PURCHASE...However, people's expenditure in SPENDING ON housing decreased to only 22% while the expenditure MONEY SPENT ON for food ...


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