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The % of national shares spent on food, accommodation, transportation, health care and clothing


IvanMS027 43 / 56 9  
Nov 28, 2016   #1
The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009

The percentage of national shares spending on food, accommodation, transportation, health care and clothing in the US Canada, UK and Japan in 2009 is shown in the bar graph. Overall, it can be seen that housing was the highest spending on while the least was the health care for most of the countries.

First of all, the United States and Canada experienced the same proportion around 15 percent for food, followed by the UK having 20 percent, then Japan getting 3 percent higher than the UK. For housing matter, there was no proportion below 20 percent, indicating that most of the countries spent many in this sector. Around a quarter was spent by the US and UK while Canada and Japan had around 21 and 22 percent respectively.

The country where spent the most on transportation was Canada having a quarter while Japan got a half of that proportion. The United States had around 17 percent, followed by the UK having 2 percent lower. For clothing, the nearly same proportion was seen among countries, having around 5 percent. Furthermore, for health care, the United States spent the most, getting around 7 percent, while the others spent below 5 percent.

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Bams17 28 / 43  
Nov 28, 2016   #2
... is shown in theclocation issuepassive voice always followed "by" bar graph.

Overall, it can be seen that housing was the highest spending ...

this is confusing sentence, make clear your sentence, for example overall, it can bee seen that the biggest is..... while the lowest is....

First of all, the United States (...) proportion around 15 percent for food

i think that you should concentrate see the data because you wrong get the data.

then Japan getting 3 percent higher than the UK.

there is no verb in this sentence.

1. focus on s + v agreement
2. focus on data
3. check or ensure before uploaded


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