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With the humble attitude, we can earn the respect from others and relieve ourselves.; Toefl exam!



Adamtong 9 / 30  
Sep 18, 2014   #1
Do you agree or disagree:the world is busy and crowded,we should not expect people to be polite to others.

I was alarmed up by my phone,cleaned my face and rushed out of my house.I reached the bus station without a relief.There are already a lot of people waiting in there.Here came the bus.It was already overcrowded,but we try our best to get into the bus.We all knew the condition would not better even if we wait the next bus.I waited and waited and waited for my terminus.It was a long way to go,and i even go back to my dream,standing and tired.Suddenly,OOOOch! Someone step on my feet.It so hurt that barely can i hold my tears.Without showing a little regret,the guy get through the overcrowded car,and rush out without apology.

This case makes me wonder,as the world is busy and crowded,do we need to be polite to others?should we expect people to be polite to others? As for me,we should always be polite to others and forgive others impolite behaviors.

First,being polite makes our life simple and comfort. When you are consulting a person with some problems,you point out your question with a mild smile,look in his eyes and sometimes nod approvingly.He would appreciate your well-educated behavior and explain the problem clearly and concretely..Because of your respect to him ,he would be in good mood and thus you can have a good time talking with him.Respect is mutual. If you want people treat you nicely then you'd better treat people nicely.We can hardly imagine when we smile to a person and in return he insult you. We can never live alone in this busy and crowded city,so it is smart to be polite to others.

Second,forgiveness can relieve us.Don't trap in the plot that he step on your feet without apology. Sometimes people are just so busy that he doesn't even notice he hurts you.Forgiveness is an attitude to our life which can free us from blaming on other's faults to embrace the day we have. We have much better things to do in a day than cursing on other's mistakes. You can easily say sorry to your toe for the guy who hurt you then start your work and enjoy your day.

Taking into account of all factors listed above,I prefer to be polite to others and forgive others impolite behaviors.With this humble attitude, we can earn the respect from others and relieve ourselves.

Actually i do not think this is a valid issue.
I don't think i describe the busy morning vividly and accurately
I don't think my reasons are strong and concrete
there must be some improper sentences even though i try my hard to avoid
Thank you for your suggestions!

Gilchrist2014 3 / 8  
Sep 18, 2014   #2
if you could put the essay question up top it will give a better understand of your point of view. I love your use of imagery to give the reader a vivid image of your situation. I think you should try to take out the informal parts of it like "Don't trap in the plot that he step on your feet without apology" I thought that you shouldn't use. Also try to make your essay a little longer by adding facts on your own point of view. Overall I liked it
Anfalia 40 / 46  
Sep 19, 2014   #3
There arewere already a lot of people waiting in there.Here came the bus.It was already overcrowded,but we try tried our best to get into the bus

. We all knew the condition would not be better even if we wait the next bus.I waited and waited and waited for my terminus.It was a long way to go,and i even gowent back to my dream,standing and tired.Suddenly,OOOOch! Someone step on my feet.It so hurt that barely can i hold my tears.Without showing a little regret,the guy get got through the overcrowded car,and rush out without an apology.[/quote]

i got incorrect using of grammatical in the first paragraph. but overall i like your written.
anyway, i am not an expert one. good luck!


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