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TOEFL iBT ESSAY: ONE SHOULD LISTEN TO OTHERS OR NOT IN TEAM WORK



songjianzhi 2 / 5  
Feb 17, 2013   #1
Although one should get his/her own independent view on problems and be able to finish his/her own work by him/herself, it will be different when it comes to a team work. For my part, one should listen to others in the group in order to achieve the goal easier and better.

First of all, everyone makes mistakes; even the best leader could make a wrong decision. Especially in a team work, the person who controls the power of determination always stays in a condition that is not stable enough to tell a question appropriately. He/she may be tricked by the opponents or be too excited to go the right way. So listening to the partners is definitely a must.

In addition, as a team, we need every one to make a success. If all the members in the team listen to themselves only, the work will never be done. We need import the democracy to the team work, which means all the staff takes part in the process of making a plan and choosing a way to go. All for one, one for all.

Finally, nowadays we usually get in big problems that are so complex that several people cannot handle well. Cooperation is what we need the most to get things done. For instance, one is professional at the operating of machines but he cannot read the Japanese introduction, so he needs to listen to the one who can read Japanese well. For a better end, listening and communicating is an inevitable thing to work in a tremendous team.

From what I have discussed above, we can easily come to the conclusion that it is necessary to give opportunities to others to express their opinions. Listening to others is a must.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 17, 2013   #2
Although one should get his/her own independent view on problems and be able to finish his/her own work by him/herself, it will be different when it comes to a team work.

.... well... I think the real idea you wanted convey had not come out properly. This is my suggestion;
There is no doubt that it is important for one to think independently and handle his or her work without depending on others if this person wants to be successful in life. However, it is also equally important that this person is a good team player and respect other's views when he or she behaves within the team.

For my partFor me , one should listen to others in the group in order to achieve the goal easier and better.

Especially in a team work, the person who controls the power of determination always stays in a condition that is not stable enough to tell a question appropriately.

This sentence sounds confusing. The reader cannot understand your idea. I think you better re-phrase it.
Also you need to give specific examples to back your reasons. I dont find specific examples here.

Next time when you do a post, include your prompt as well. That helps us to provide you with more relevant feed backs
OP songjianzhi 2 / 5  
Feb 17, 2013   #3
OH, THANK U VERY MUCH. I am a freshman here and this is the first thread of mine. So preciate for giving me advices. I'm preparing for TOEFL TEST, so I'd like to improve my writing skills. As a ChinaRen I usually write in a mandarine way without awareness...
dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 17, 2013   #4
:D We are happy to help you. The four para essay structure is the best recommended one for this task.
OP songjianzhi 2 / 5  
Feb 18, 2013   #5
Here some of the links I suggest you to read;

Appreciated! I've learnt sth. from them. It seems I still have a long way to go.


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