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[IETLS] TV advertising is bad - Agree or Disagree?



woodfish 2 / 2  
Nov 3, 2013   #1
Advertisements plays a major role on TV in market economies. Despite the benefits of such information, many people criticize the role of TV advertising. To what extend do you agree or disagree with their view?

In contemporary economy system, television advertising plays an essential role in providing information and promoting products. Even though it does carry some adverse effects, simply criticizing TV advertisement cannot be justified.

It is manifest TV advertising has some negative impacts on both businesses and individuals. Firstly, the most obvious disadvantage is the high cost involvement. Since advertisements are required to be repeated several times to attract the attention of the target market, it inevitably includes a high cost to air on television channels, which is not affordable for some small businesses. Secondly, the majority of advertisements on TV only last a few seconds thereby not being effective on conveying information about products. Therefore , it would not appeal to consumer and induce them to buy goods.

On the other hand, the enjoyment of watching TV could be seriously interrupted and spoiled due to the increasing number of advertisements. As a consequence, people have to cope with the constant distraction from programs.

Clearly, however, TV advertisements present a number of advantages. In the first place, they communicate products to a large number of people, who could be turned into potential consumers, in a short span of time. in terms of products sales, it may leads to an increase of purchasing products. Correspondingly, television advertisements help to keep the price of consumer goods down. In the second place, advertising industry is an essential source of employment.

In summary, it is highly unlikely to avoid advertisements being an effective marking strategy on television. But at least limiting the length of advertisement and improving the consistency of TV programs can be done.

dumi 1 / 6795  
Nov 3, 2013   #2
Good introduction :)
For this task, you need to include specific examples to support your reasons that you use to justify your opinion. I don't find them here.
OP woodfish 2 / 2  
Nov 4, 2013   #3
Thanks Dumi

I am preparing IELTS exams at the moment and struggling with my writing. I happen to know this useful website where someone could correct my grammar and structure of essay.

From your point of view, examples seem to be essential to support my ideas, which are likely to be ignored when I do my writing.

Thank you for your advice.
ashalatha 1 / 5  
Nov 4, 2013   #4
you are using good vocabulary. if u use high frequency words then you can get good ielts score.. you have'nt grammer mistakes.
JethroJosh - / 31  
Nov 4, 2013   #5
No high frequency words do not increase your score ( it is a myth). Your score is based on the number mistakes you make in a whole essay. You should have a wide range vocab.It doesn't mean you need 'high frequency words'. Try to avoid errors and use simple English. Uncommon lexis means = some formal words and its accurate usages. There are many simple formal words that you can show off. Use them!
ashalatha 1 / 5  
Nov 4, 2013   #6
thank u so much... for your advice
actually my friend said that if u use high frequency vocabulary then you can get high ielts score.. really i dont know but i am also very suffering about this writing task.

can u give me any another advice's about ielts.
anyway thank u for giving your advice
JethroJosh - / 31  
Nov 4, 2013   #7
Just check out a few corrections I tried here. It is not in the same web page though.


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