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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.



DIVYA RAJKUMAR 1 / -  
Jul 20, 2014   #1
With surging population and urbanisation, the traffic congestion and air pollution have become pressing issues in the todays society. Most people believe that soaring petrol price is the best way to tackle these issues. Some people believe that hike in the petrol prices will reflect on the low economy residents. However, the car owners are the middle and high income people therefore still the congestion and air pollution persists. In my perspective, increasing petrol price is not only the best solution but also the other measures can be added up.

Firstly,the government can urge the citizens to use a electric car in lieu of petrol car. In addition,non motor vehicles such as bicycle would mitigate CO, CO2 emissions and global warming. Besides that the government can build SPECIAL lanes for bike riders and also government can adhere obligatory pollution levy or congestion charges. So, the money received can be leveraged to reform public transportation systems such as metro,trams etc.

Additionally,alternative to fossil fuels can be bio diesel obtained from vegetable oil or animal fat which are predominately used in USA . These bio diesels in turn reduces emissions. For instance,British train operating company have incorporated 80% petro diesel and 20% biodiesel. As a result,these naturally obtained oils could protect environment from green house emissions, bio dergradation.

To sum up, Rising fuel prices is not the optimal approach to bring down the amount of traffic congestion and pollution issues. Alternatively,other rigorous methods can be adhered to tinker the current sytem. Despite this,it is the combined effort of the government and people to guard the environment by planting more trees which will moderate the air pollution.

dumi 1 / 6795  
Jul 21, 2014   #2
Well, what is the purpose of writing this essay? Is it for practicing IELTS or TOEFL? It is good if you mention your purpose in the title itself so that we can provide you with task related feedbacks. Also, you should have included the full prompt in the post for us to understand your topic better in order to provide you with more meaningful comments.

Excellent writing :)

However, the car owners are the middle and high income people therefore still the congestion and air pollution persists.

It is good that you used this reason to defend your position on the issue and body para is the place for such reasoning.
You display excellent writing skills :)
tiaDS 73 / 222  
Jul 21, 2014   #3
Hello Divya,
Your writing is impressive and especially in introduction paragraph which depicts that you have great writing skill. I love so much your introduction. However, you should attach the prompt completely to drive readers easy when they review your essay. Ielts has many kinds of task such as agree-disagree, advantages-disadvantages, problem-solution or cause-effect. Those tasks have different patters to write. As per my experience, when we got the task of agree-disagree, we can state our own view clearly in intro, but in body paragraphs, there have to be balance view; the first body paragraph you can give some reasons why you stand at disagree, while the second body paragraph why there should agree. hope, this helps.


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