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IELTS task 2 - Increasing tourism for inhabitants, environment and economy


Tan0295 1 / -  
Aug 20, 2018   #1
Hello, this is my first thread in this forum. Please give your advice for my essay. Thankyou.

raising of tourism effects



Tourism has extremely increased in the last five decades. Some people believe that raising of tourism brought overweight negative impact on local in habitants and th environment. While, others claim that is carry positive effect for the economy.

In the one hand, object destination endure drawbacks for indigenous and the environment. The overcrowded traveler carelessly leave garbage and pollute the tourism attractions. This can be seen in Bali, Indonesia, visitors throwing trash around the beach and it will turn into plastic pollution in ocean. The litter problem in Bali ocean is getting worse and international media reported big concern about this situation. Definitely, it caused damage for the ocean ecosystems, sea organism will extinct and the beautiful landscape under the sea fade away.

However, when there are many tourist in a object attraction, it also give improvements to the economy. With the high number of visitors, it exactly boost a national foreign exchange income. For example, Bali offering nature scenery to attract people, so that many foreigner come to bali enjoy the nature landscape. They usually buy handcraft, accessories, clothes nearby. There is no doubt that tourism have huge effect for economic development, because when they had vacation and spent their money, it will give great impact for local profit.

Although there are some benefits of increasing tourism for economic, the side effects of that carry damage for environment. It is better to control the visitor for come to the object destination.
ptnlytqnho 4 / 8 2  
Aug 20, 2018   #2
@Tan0295
Hello. There are some mistakes in your essay.

habitants and the environment.

Bali

it also gives
it exactly boosts
"The overcrowded travellers
tourism has huge effect

the side effects of that carries
It is better to control the number of visitors coming to ...
nuradiapuspa 11 / 25  
Aug 24, 2018   #3
Dear @Tan0295,

You need to post the complete prompt, so that we can comment your essay in proper way.

In the IELTS Task 2, in paragraph one, you should give introduction sentence and then it is better if you clearly state your position/argument, do you agree or disagree.

Good luck!


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