IELTS essay, Increasing weight of people - causes and solutions

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.
What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Nowadays overweight is one of the major problems of many countries, especially developed ones. The main reason for that is unhealthy lifestyle, which includes bad food habits and the lack of movement. In my essay I will analyze this problem and provide some possible solutions.

As I have already mentioned one of the principal causes of overweight is wrong nutrition. People tend to consume more products with high content of fats and carbohydrates, such as butter, cookies, roasted meat and fast food in particular, whereas the consumption of fruits and vegetables decreases. In order to help people to form healthy diet government and mass media should promote healthy diet and fast food restaurants should begin to offer a wider range of salads and vegetable soups.

Another reason of overweight is the lack of movement in people's life. More and more people spend their working day sitting at the table in office. Moreover they use their cars to travel to work instead of walking or riding a bicycle. I think that one should encourage people to visit gyms and fitness centres, go in for sports, use bicycles or walk if they need to travel for sahort distances. In order to implement these measures government should try to lower the prices for exercising in fitness centres, build sport facilities and increase the salaries of trainers, provide separate bicycle paths on city roads.

In conclusion I would like to say that overweight, being one of the main problems of nowadays society, has two major reasons - bad food preferences and the lack of movement. One can try to solve this problem by promoting healthy lifestyle, although I think that it is a choice of each person whether to watch over his weight and, therefore, health or not.

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Hello everybody! I will appreciate any feedback for my essay from your side.

You wrote a good essay. Try to avoid repetitions and to re-elaborate what you re-state in your conclusion more. In addition, in my opinion you shouldn't say what you are going to do in your essay, there is no need to do it.

I hope I have been useful

... "bad eating habits" includes both ideas of eating the wrong food as well as wrong eating patterns.


.... lack of physical exercises.
Good introduction :)


Paying less attention to a balanced diet which is rich in nutrient value is the main reason for becoming overweight.


... "healthy diet" gets repeated..
Good essay.... You follow the right structure and you display good writing skills. Good Luck!

I think you shouldn't mention the reasons in the introduction. You can say something like:
"Nowadays, many people are having overweight problems. Those problems can reflect negatively on their health and society. There are several reasons we should know so we can limit the dangers."

This way, you can avoid repeating the causes in the body.

Thank you all very much! I'll consider all your remarks and try to avoid these mistakes in my future essays :)