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THE INFLUENCE OF PHONE CALLS



huyjunnie 4 / 11  
Feb 9, 2022   #1

THE INFLUENCE OF PHONE CALLS



Anybody can use a mobile phone to answer the work and personal calls at any time or 7 days a week. Does this development have more positive or negative effects on both individuals and society? (Dated: September 9th, 2017)

At present days, as technology increasingly develops, a cell phone has become an integral part of people's lives when they facilitate mobile phones for work and personal contact all the time. Despite some demerits it brings about, its beneficial aspects outweighed those.

On the one hand, there are several particular benefits from the smartphone we can derive from. First of all, via mobile phone, geographical obstacles could not render us isolated from our families and friends. For example, during the COVID-19 pandemic, face-to-face contacts will be mostly restricted; hence, we still can hold phone calls with our families to stay in touch with each other. Moreover, regarding business and education, telephones may aid communication and exchange of information swiftly so that the efficiency and effectiveness are fostered. Therefore, a majority of enterprises capitalize on online contacts to assign their employees work and for business discussions without meeting in person.

On the other hand, some detrimental impacts of cellphones on daily life should not be overlooked. Initially, it could be a nuisance since mobile phones manipulate people and deprive them of personal freedom and privacy. For instance, a bombardment of phone calls for work at night could disrupt our valuable sleeping time and cause a great deal of time. In addition, in terms of relationships, they will be transformed in the adverse manner at the presence of cellphones. It could be attributed to the fact that people opt to make brisk calls to keep up-to-date about others instead of regular meetings, so people could be virtually linked but factually separated.

In conclusion, albeit disadvantageous to some extent, positive influences of phone calls are more significant.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15347  
Feb 10, 2022   #2
The discussion format used by the writer is not really well targeted towards the discussion requirement. While there is a need to discuss the reasons why the positives outweigh the negatives, it should not be done in a comparative essay format that uses one paragraph for a positive and one for a negative. Rather, this must be written in the form of a written debate. That means, there are no seperate positive and negative paragraphs. What the examiner will expect to read is the skill by which the writer will turn a negative consideration into a positive aspect. Recall that the requirement is to prove that the positives will outweigh the negatives based on the writer's opinion. Therefore, the "spin" must be in effect with reference to the reasoning development of the writer. Turn the negative into a positive to get the best score in this type of discussion presentation.
OP huyjunnie 4 / 11  
Feb 11, 2022   #3
Thank you, Holt! Your advice is as usual useful.


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